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Hey guys, I just wanted to make this thread so that if anyone has any critiques for the story let me know here. All I  ask is that  you keep the tone civil, and maybe not make silly suggestions like killing the main character off. I have already tried that several times. Susan was supposed to kill him in that hug, Evan was supposed to throw a dagger between his eyes. He should have drowned in the  pond. Idk  guys. Main character powers are really scary

Thanks for the feedback so far guys!

Thanks to  Owlbear and KaellomI.  I will be including skill fusion more  often.(Although  he will probably  fail quite often, since i decided to have a minimum skill level requirement for some  (idea by  Kuroyuki).

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I am going  to make Voice  get  a little training in a new area. My discussion with Owlbear helped me  think of this. Thanks again Owlbear!

Alright guys,my laptop broke. I ordered a new one, but it probably won't be here for a few days. So then next chapter will be delayed.

I'm terribly sorry.

Alright guys i broke down and bought another laptop instead of ordering a new one. It will still take me a little while in order to get all the information(i do this weird thing with his exp on skills) but after that i'll be back in full swing. So just try to bear with it for a little while. : )