So im thinking of changing the summary of the story to a more appealing one, hopefully one that is less of a put-off than what i have currently. i have come up with a little something, tell me what you guys think.
" Roland, a young man whose power can make gods and demons tremble. Fate itself holds no sway over him.
With none able to restrain him, he follows his own ideals and whims, killing or saving as the mood takes him.
However, such power comes with a price. And the time to pay for it once again draws closer with each passing day. . .
Four mortals stand inside a large hall. Having reached the end of a long journey, their last chance at survival rests in a dangerous Summoning that could leave them either crippled or dead.
Cursed by a mysterious group of beings for reasons unknown and currently hunted by enemies far outmatching them in strength, they gamble everything on the hope that someone answers their call. "
That's it, short and sweet. How is it? If you have any suggestions they will be welcome.
Also, im working on the next chapter, but i just think i made a mistake when i made that one from Lilith's POV earlier that takes place after the training sesson Reina and Roland had. It seems awkward now to have made that one and THEN post chapters detailing the training bit, because now the order seems off.
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Anyway, im working on it so dont worry. Also I notice some plot holes that i need to address as well, such as how i made Roland seemingly OP as fuck in at least one of his previous lives too, yet somehow he isnt known by the gods who have been around for ages.
I think that there are some people who have wondered how he could have multiple live and be as strong as he is but not be more widely known to the long lived races. Other than a more recent character, I have not made any mention of any of the long living races, like gods such as Loki, knowing of Roland from one of his previous lives. It could be explained since none have been introduced yet but it is strange for Loki to not have heard of Roland right? Or at least heard rumors of him. I mean you would wonder why that is, right? Or maybe you didnt notice? Anyway that is a problem i realize now as i didn't think of it that deep before, and so I will likely make something to explain it in later chapters.
I will try not to leave plot holes, but sometimes they could be left intentionally to be explained later. Regardlesss, please tell me of any as you find them, as i may not have noticed them myself.