Author: Thank you for reading. Working all day yesterday. Seriously though
Gone one day and ended up on top weekly...Not surprised with what followed based on what I saw happen to other fictions. New horrifying reviews (oooo scary)...pfft, they didn’t even read the later chapters and don't know about the hidden main plot I’ve hinted on (Are my readers paying attention?). Mistakes in early chapters? I’m only human, seriously. It's not even that bad.
In my opinion, if you don't even read the story properly, your comments don't carry much weight to me. Though I do agree that my story is flawed, the genre itself is very difficult to make truly original due to the sheer number of people writing it. The point of this website is to help writers improve (Or did I read the wrong description). It’s why I ask for people’s opinions.
Harem easy to acquire? The first two yes, mc needs reliable allies that won't stab him in the back. What better than when they are young and open to be influenced by their surrounding experiences. The other ones...not by a long shot. The first two were met within circumstances that made it only an inevitability, Belle and any other members coming later won't have such circumstances making them a lot less willing.
Anyways, let's continue. I can keep going on about explaining the story, but a previous comment said to believe in the reader's intelligence and I will do just that. I’ve seen a lot of smart and interesting comments after all to prove it.
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I left Linex bound on a table, he seemed unable to comprehend his surroundings after our little session. His death will have to come later though, I have a few things I need him to do for me, so I left his face and hands untouched. It’s still foolish how he demanded someone he only just met to pay respects to him. I wonder if my brotherly affection was well received?
My mood was spoiled as I looked at my latest notification.
*Ding*
Class system update will occur in 17 hrs.
*Sigh* These gods are utter fools. They didn’t like me since the beginning since I actually did something at the end of my life worth acknowledging while the others didn’t from what I know, useless. What the hell did they expect me to do, twiddle my thumbs?
As such, I have constantly made sure to call them various titles and berate them endlessly in my prayers after gaining their names. Amare approved greatly since they can't do anything to me directly and she said she had a plan. They are already going out of their way to mess with me, so they should at least expect some verbal abuse on my part.
I’m still baffled by their behavior though, do they want me to help this world or not? Amare too seemed fed up with the hypocrisy as she explained how these guys would stop at nothing to get ahead. They all turned on Amare due to me having exceptional work so far compared to the other chosen. Val herself was ostracized for supporting me.
I couldn’t help asking why the hell things have gotten so ridiculous, but Amare seemed to have mixed feelings about telling me. Though she did tell me a few things.
From what I understand, something happened in the past that caused some sort of upheaval in their former society. The idiots I’m dealing with are only a few of the many that took advantage of the situation. I didn’t get any details of the event itself though, but enough was said for me to know it was pretty bad. From her expression alone, I understand it’s difficult to talk about.
Ending these thoughts, I went to work, I don't want to waste what remains of my time using this system, so I got back to making as many things as possible since getting skills and classes has been getting more difficult. I can always work to get more skills, but I’m sure my crafting abilities are about to take a steep hit.
First thing was finishing the equipment since I don't know how difficult it will be to make it in the future. The [Binding Needles] will have to be shelved for now though. They cost a lot of time to make in bulk and I’d rather focus on my group's equipment.
If anything the 100 I have now would be better used similar to how the former slaves in Labrindel used the slave collars. I won't be staying here after this, so I need to prepare a few defensive measures for the village and cities when their protectors are gone, if you can really call them that.
Murderers and such are the ideal for sacrificial pawns against monsters even after a proper military force is trained up. They shouldn’t be too hard to find, and I have a small stockpile of slave collars from the raids we’ve done on slave caravans. There are exceptions to who is enslaved though as killing to survive is the norm. My main target for now is the sects guards. Amare didn’t seem to disapprove when I ran this idea by her as well.
I got annoyed by the term sects as well, but Amare said that's just what they call themselves. I’ll change the term to something more appropriate when I’m done dragging them off their high horse.
Amare made sure to warn me not to intentionally involve the civilians. In a world like this, casualties are expected but shouldn’t be added to willingly. Like how the sects in Tarthus went crazy and killed people all over. It was unfortunate, but there was nothing I could do at the time. I just have to try and prevent the same thing from happening in the future.
Moving back to the task at hand, I already binged on creating materials for the past couple days, so putting the new armor together for everyone didn’t take too long. The main thing the girls wanted me to do though was finish making a massive amount of undergarments (I swear that saying about women and clothes…*Sigh*). The different styles they wanted (armor included) was what cost me the most time, but I made noticeable improvements on [Handicraft] because of it. I also made some good weapons for everyone with a few improvements to other things.
The whole thing turned out pretty well considering I don't have any of the more rarer metals available. Though using iron without any impurities seriously added to its defensive abilities. Rust even started demanding some to work with after analyzing my armor.
Spoiler :
X6
Hybridized Armor
Metal/Cloth Armor (Set)
Rank: C
Description:
Made of mysterious material. The fabric was woven through special methods to form an odd hybridization between high quality metal and cloth with enhanced properties.
Effects:
Defense up (Medium)
Durability up (Lower Medium)
Textile Strength up (Upper Medium)
Softness up (Upper Medium)
Retractive attribute
Self Repair (Very Small)
Abrasion resistant (Lower Medium)
Deterioration resistant (Lower Medium)
Temperature resistant (Lower Medium)
Body Enhance (Small)
X40
Hybridized Cloth Undergarment
Superior Cloth
Rank: C-
Description:
This undergarment is made of mysterious material making it soft and durable to a shocking degree.
Effects:
Textile Strength up (Upper Medium)
Softness up (Upper Medium)
Retractive attribute
Self Repair (Very Small)
Abrasion resistant (Lower Medium)
Deterioration resistant (Lower Medium)
Temperature resistant (Lower Medium)
Imperitus Blade
Weapon
Rank: C
Description:
Intended to be formed into a great-sword. The process used to make the blade made it smaller, But way more deadly and durable.
Effects:
Durability up (Medium)
Sharpness up (Medium)
Balance up (Small)
Self repair (Very Small)
Fire Damage (Moderate)
Quick Morph (Quickly repeated use can endanger the blades integrity)
X3
Quick Short-sword
Weapon
Rank: C-
Description:
A specially made short-sword that was made with an aerodynamic design and enhancements.
Effects:
Durability up (Lower Medium)
Sharpness up (Medium)
Self repair (Very Small)
Speed Boost (Small)
Shrouded Dagger
Weapon
Rank: C-
Description:
A dagger that was made difficult to see especially in dark places.
Effects:
Durability up (Lower Medium)
Sharpness up (Medium)
Self repair (Very Small)
Shrouded effect (Small)
Quick Long-sword
Weapon
Rank: C-
Description:
A specially made long-sword that performs fast and agile strikes due to its aerodynamic design and enhancements.
Effects:
Durability up (Lower Medium)
Sharpness up (Medium)
Self repair (Very Small)
Speed Boost (Small)
X3
Channeling Wand
Weapon
Rank: C-
Description:
A common wand that was improved to a terrifying degree.
Effects:
Magical targeting up (Lower Medium)
Magical Consumption down (Lower Medium)
Durability up (Lower Medium)
Self repair (Very Small)
I’m still working to improve a lot of my newer enhancements, but they are really good weapons nonetheless. One of the drawbacks of low grade materials like iron, is that I can't enhanced it with too many properties without it crumbling. Even making it enhanced with a single property to the max has its limits. If I want to get top grade gear, I’ll need better things to work with. What I did with my main weapon itself was pushing it to the limit.
If I’m lucky, I’ll be able to find some good materials in my father’s treasury.
Though it doesn’t compensate for the material grade. I think the best aspect about the enhancements, is the self repair function, as it returns the item back to it’s finished state. It takes a lot of time, but these clothes will always remain in pristine condition as long as the enhancement holds.
Knowing this Beth was overjoyed to receive her new sword and armor, the same with Shirley and Illis when they got the wands. Though Shirley mentioned a strange custom concerning mages getting wands as presents. I thoroughly ignored it, though she seemed to laugh it off. I’m glad she no longer has a problem speaking her mind around me without stuttering.
I’m sad though, that the undergarments prevented me from making more armor as I ran out of cloth until I make more with my [transmutation] skill. They didn’t seem to care as they kept trying out the various designs. I may also have to make more for Illis later as she is at that age.
Belle never stopped looking at me strangely however after my experience with the blood awakening. I offered to make her a new bow, but she refused saying it was a combat style forced on her to practice. The underlying tone held some venom toward me. She doesn’t hate me, but I can tell she doesn’t like me either. There is something about me she doesn’t seem to accept from what I can tell. It’s not like I’m seeking her approval, and she at least gets along with the others, so I don't really care.
As The timer drew to a close I lamented how I’m about to lose such a convenient system. I can only hope Amare’s plan, whatever it is, will work okay.
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*Ding*
Class system undergoing update.
*Zzt* Error.
Energy fluctuation detected from the user's soul.
Compensating…
*Zzt* Error.
Class system update compromised.
*Zzt* Error.
Class system changes lost.
*Zzt* Error.
Class system destroyed.
Analyzing…
Solution: The user’s soul has mutated the system using an unknown energy.
Further updates and calibrations to the user’s system...Locked.
Initializing the New system.
0%
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100%
[Status 2.0] Available for review.
Ugh...that...hurt.
Amare never mentioned that it would be painful. Fortunately, I was alone when it happened. The girls started a small party for themselves celebrating their new clothes and such. When Abra pulled out some alcohol for the occasion, I ran predicting the outcome. No way am i gonna get trapped in that situation. The only concerned party right now is the fairy gazing up at me from my pocket as I am on all fours gasping for breath.
Slowly the pain faded away and my curiosity to see this new system took hold of me.
*Ding*
[quart=Name,Race]Kuro Lux,Dreadling[/quart][quart=Level,Age]64,13[/quart][quart=SP,CP]0,0[/quart]
Status 2.0
Acolyte of Chaos
[quart=HP,HR]12910,175.2/s[/quart][quart=MP,MR]12615,200.7/s[/quart][quart=SP,SR]11580,167.6/s[/quart]
[quart=Strength,Intelligence]698,615[/quart][quart=Vitality,Wisdom]622,653[/quart][quart=Dexterity,Focus]714,677[/quart][quart=Agility,Speed]648,618[/quart]
Main Stats
Vigor
527
[quart=Leadership,Charisma]19,19[/quart][quart=Charm,Art]19,18[/quart][quart=Stealth,Sense]26,20[/quart][quart=Faith,Luck]21,20[/quart]
Sub Stats
Willpower
20
[quart=Fire,Water]8%,6%[/quart][quart=Earth,Wind]8%,9%[/quart][quart=Light,Dark]9%,7%[/quart][quart=Spacial,Neutral]0%,16%[/quart]
Affinities
The difference is obvious, my class system is gone. What replaced it is this [Acolyte of Chaos] bit. All the buffs and such from the former system are also gone. The name seems fitting for my [Acolytes disposition] though.
Acolyte of Chaos
Description:
As the Champion of Chaos, you scoff at superficial limits. Only fools limit themselves to the possibilities around them. Insights and understanding will improve the user, as well as gaining stats and abilities upon achieving each form of enlightenment.
No effects gained yet.
...Well...it has potential. I can try and use what I learned from the former system to get a head start as well. Even so...I really hate those gods. Let’s just look at all my skills to make sure everything is there.
(This is just his skills and its not necessary to read unless you want to know were they are and what he still has.)
Spoiler :
Unbound
Title
Unique
Description:
You are no longer chained by the laws of the world. Those who wield this title are immune to any control spells and have limitless growth potential.
Effects
Mind Control Resist +100%
Physical Control Resist +100%
Mysterious connection to the Goddess Amare Anima Nexu
Body growth unrestricted (Awards the skill: Growth Correction)
Delicate Body
Trait
Rare
Description:
This trait makes the user’s body have a delicate and supple appearance with clear and beautiful skin and hair without hindering physical performance. This is a rare trait of the user’s species. This trait is currently partially awakened.
Effects:
Delicate and supple muscles
Unblemished skin
Perfect white teeth
Pleasant scent (varies from person to person)
Soul Bound Mind
Trait
Unique
Description:
This trait allows the user to recall memories. Even ones he shouldn’t have.
Effects:
Grants memories from the soul
(Later I will only put mains in)
Connected
Trait
Unique
Description:
Your connection to the Goddess Amare gave an unexpected mutation within your soul. Your soul can form spiritual connections with people you are truly close to.
Effects:
Connected Intuition
Temporary Direct Soul Connection
Bonds of Love
Current Connections:
Amare (*Hidden*
Shiro (Max Affection)
Puerial (Loyal - In Love - Unguarded...)
Abra (Parental - Proud - Lonely...)
Belle (Curious - Cautious - Guarded...)
Beth (Friendly - Open - Trusted...)
Tammy (Friendly - Open - Trusted...)
Shirley (Doting - Open - Shy...)
Illis (Sisterly - Open - Idolized...)
Cyanin (Friendly - Shy - Territorial…)
[Info Tab]
Bloodline
Trait
Racial
Description:
Power courses through the user’s blood. At its call the user gains strength.
Effects:
Blood Surge: X1.1 to physical stats for 5min (30min cooldown)
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Skill [Bloodwake Step] unlocked
Second Awakening [locked]
Third Awakening [locked]
Language Comprehension
Passive Skill
Unique
Description:
All language is understood and spoken by the user.
(Consider this a little extra, good luck. Best Wishes, Amare)
Effects:
All spoken and written language is understood
Growth Correction
Passive Skill
Unique
Description:
Due to mastering being allowed control of your body and mind your future growth can be decided by your desires. (Other’s can be influenced when conditions are met)
Effects:
Influence your growth
Stealth Steps
Passive Skill
Uncommon
Description:
The shadows shroud your steps, and hide your presence.
Effects:
Detection while walking in dark places -30%
Detection while not moving in dark corners -70%
Magical Body
Passive Skill
Uncommon
Description:
The user can cast and control mana and spells released from the body without restrictions. Results are dependent on the caster’s comprehension and control over the affinity being cast. Unique magic with an intended use can become a separate skill.
Effects:
The user can cast various types of magic.
The user can more freely control his/her mana.
Upkeep: Depends on the user and intended effect.
Crisis Perception
Passive Skill
Uncommon
Description:
The user has better intuition than most.
Chance to feel impending crisis during combat.
5% increase in perceptive abilities
Acolyte Disposition
Passive Skill
Uncommon
Description:
The user’s code of morality gives him strength.
Strength can be restored to max once per week (HP,MP,SP).
+1% healing effects.
Beast Within
Passive Skill
Uncommon
Description:
The user can draw strength from within during times of strife.
20% resistance to intimidation.
Lucky Bastard
Passive Skill
Uncommon
Description:
The user has a random chance of getting a lucky break.
Identify
Active Skill
Mastery 26/100
Description:
Mastering this skill gives the user more information.
Example
Lv 1 - This is a basic sword.
Lv 25 - This is a basic copper sword with a blunt edge, due to mistreatment the durability is low and will break at any moment. Overall Quality: H
Physical Control
Passive Skill
Mastery 25/100
Description:
The user has better control over their body
Effects:
Flexibility +12.5%
Perception +12.5%
Energy +12.5%
Agility +.01%
Handicraft
Passive Skill
Mastery 28/100
Description:
Delicate work and artistry is easier to perform
Effects:
Intricacy +14%
Artistry +14%
Work Speed +14%
Dexterity +.025%
Mana Control
Passive Skill
Mastery 25/100
Description:
The ability to manipulate mana and cast more effective spells
Effects
Efficiency +12.5%
Purity +12.5%
AOE Range +12.5%
Focus +.01%
Magic Hands
Active Skill
Mastery 25/100
Description:
You can use mana channeled through your hands to influence your surroundings
Effects
Alter the properties of objects for a permanent or limited effect time.
Effect the body of other people (the mind is immune to alteration)
Slightly stimulates a person’s potential.
Blade Utility
Passive Skill
Mastery 15/100
Description:
The user can used bladed weapons more effectively.
Effects
Attack speed with blades +7.5%
Attack accuracy with blades +7.5%
Attack damage with blades +7.5%
Close Combat
Passive Skill
Mastery 17/100
Description:
The user is capable of fighting in close quarters to the fullest extent of his abilities.
Effects:
Reaction speed +8.5%
Burst power +8.5%
Finesse +8.5%
Mana Synthesis
Active Skill
Novice Level 9
Description:
Analyze and create mana formations with varying effects. Effects are dependent on the user.
Effects
Analyze a mana formation
Replicate known formations
Create a mana formation
Destroy a mana formation
Magic Clad
Active Skill
Intermediate Level 8
Description:
The user clad's him/herself or objects with mana for various effects depending on the element.
Effects
Physical Armament +18% Elemental effect
Equipment Armament +9% Elemental effect
Partial Clad Armament - Upkeep depends on amount clad
Upkeep: 480 MP /s
Healing Ray
Active Skill
Intermediate Level 1
Description:
Light mana is siphoned from the user to heal a targets injuries. The closer the target, the easier it is to heal.
Effects
Body Regeneration +10% /s within 0-1 meter of the target.
Body regeneration +5% /s within 2-3 meters of the target.
Burst Heal (Thrown) 1% Body Regeneration for every 200 MP added.
Upkeep: 500 MP /s
Transmutation
Active Skill
Novice Level 5
Description:
Reforge the inner-workings of nature and bend it’s wonders to the user’s will.
Effects
Perform mana induced probes of base components.
Re-structure fully analyzed materials.
Convert materials at a 1:49 conversion rate
Increase quality of crafts by 10.5%
Bloodwake Step
Active Skill
Novice Level 2
Description:
The blood calls to rush. It's secrets are still hidden within.
Effects
Movements become fluid and unpredictable.
Speed stat X 1.31
Agility stat X 1.11
Upkeep: 560 HP /s, 210 MP /s, 560 SP /s
Breaker
Active Skill
Novice Level 1
Description:
Energy surges out of your strikes.
Effects
Creates a hidden force that does 1% of the users damage.
Asunder Style
Passive/Active Skill
Novice Level 1
Description:
A self created style that can one day shake the world if properly trained.
Effects
Close combat ability improved slightly.
Mid range combat very small improvement.
Mana Gathering
Passive/Active Skill
Novice Level 1
Description:
Mana is channeled from the air to improve recovery.
Effects
MPR +.1% automatically.
MPR +.5% when channeled.
I don’t know if this was do to the disappearance of the class system, but my crafting skills are gone. The ones I painstakingly gained from tailoring and the like. Did my body become incompatible with them? Is it even possible to relearn them? Such a waste of effort. Just wait, if I ever get the opportunity, I’ll be sure to ruin those gods day. If the opportunity ever presents itself, I’ll go even further.
Lucky Bastard? I don't feel like it right now.
*Sigh* My progress was slowed, but at least from what the notification said. My soul can no longer be influenced by those idiots up above. All that remains is for me to remove what's left of the seals if they are still there.
After I have Linex finish his assignment I’ll end him and my father and everything else. I need to set everything up to give my sister a better life, and move onto those new objectives Amare said I have coming up. The life I’m living now is too dangerous to bring her along and I can't bring the other’s either.
Well, with what I have planned, this place will be fine for all of them to live in.
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A/N: If you all couldn’t guess, this is a transition period where he gets stronger. All the ideas you guys had will also come up throughout the story. So comments complaining about him becoming weak and such, I felt should have waited till the transition was done. Also, if you're looking for an instantly broken can't even die character, you're gonna have to wait till the end of the story since I’m not writing an instantly broken character.
Personal rating of 3 stars to be honest. I don't post personal reviews though since I would rather leave it up to the readers ability. Heck, I even found a few errors in past chapters when I wrote this one that I need to get to (The likelihood of this chapter having a few errors isn't zero either). I will be the first to say this fiction isn’t perfect.
BUT, writing bad reviews without fully reading a written work’s content doesn’t give the writer a fair evaluation since they didn’t read everything there is to know. If I get a bad review, who cares, I'm still gonna keep writing. But if the reviewer doesn’t know jack about the entire story, they ain't worth any weight in a conversation regarding the topic itself. Those who didn’t even finish the first arc shouldn’t even be making reviews in my opinion.
This is a LONG story, mc didn’t even leave the area yet. I didn’t even introduce what he is really supposed to fight, it’s not even the ones he is about to prepare for now (these guys need to die though). Not to mention the churches (like I didn’t hint that early on). Or why Amare is so protective of Kuro. There is more to what's going on than just saving a world from corruption.
*Gentle Tone*
‘Bec’ your idea was great, problem is, the gods are idiots and wouldn’t allow him such an edge in the first place. Plus, since Skyrim is a game world such a thing is possible to do, I personally question how an item would remain stable in real life with all that enhancement without it being made from extremely durable and op material. MC needs better materials for it to work remotely similar (Like adamantine or something way higher grade). It will be exploited later though since the concept is still pretty cool. Though he lost most of his crafting abilities beside [Transmutation] so it will be a while.
Next chapter the MC will begin the hunt and such. The rant was just something I needed to address now rather than later. Everyone so far has mostly been pretty cool. And yea I can see how some areas look more like a narrative, one of the many things I need to fix in this story.
Each chosen hold their own system to help them get stronger.
Kuro has a system designed by Amare that the gods were altering since it was placed on an open server to track all of their progress.
His system is now locked out.
Explained by Amare next chapter.