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“Captain! Here is the magic sealing bracelet!”

“Good! Force Nanda to wear it!”

“Sir!”

“Let me go you bastards! I have to save Eris!!!”

It’s chaos over there…many soldiers are trying to hold down Nanda, he really struggled to break free…flailing his hand and magic everywhere..

I…

I have to go and get Eris back..!

I gather magic power just like before, and when I was just about to jump…

What can you do?

Wha…t can i do?

(Strange…I…can’t move…)

Tell me…what can you do?

I…can..save Eris 

(Yes…I can save her…!)

Really? How?

Using my magic…

(I trained really hard…)

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What magic? You can’t do anything…you are useless…you can’t even save your ‘friend’

I’m…useless…?

(No…I’m not!)

Yes…you are

(But…if I can’t save her then who can?! Nanda is being holded right now! And Eris is in danger! If no one else is willing to…then who will!)

No one! She is destined to die…no one can save her…

(How can you say that! Nothing is pre-destined! Even my bet with that..wa…my…bet?)

Oh? It seems you are starting to remember your…’bet’

(Bet..? That goddess also said the same thing…ouch..my head…hurts)

Haha haha…your body is not ready to accept it yet…I’ll stop interfering for now…you can do whatever you want…heh..for now…

(You…ugh..my head..what happened…)

I felt a sharp pain throughout my body

(I..must not…lose consciousness…)

After some time the pain has finally go away, but…my mind is still in disarray

Even so…I’ve wasted so much time…I have to go to the dungeon fast! I hope Eris is still okay…

I jumped across the people that are currently holding Nanda down, his eyes are red…he is holding back his tears with all his might

(Don’t worry Nanda…I will get Eris out of that dungeon)

With that I hurry and went to the dungeon alone

…….

Not too long ago, after I entered the dungeon I noticed something weird…

There’s not a single monster in here! Usually there are some low level monsters on the earlier floor…but there’s nothing here

I thought of some explainations as of why there’s not a single monster as I go deeper, but nothing that I thought can explain this phenomenon perfectly. 

Feeling uneasy, I continued to delve deeper into the dungeon

right now I’m in the 5th floor

As I sweep through the floor to find the stairs, I noticed something familiar was carved into the wall. A flower with half a petal…

Eris once told me that she and Nanda made signs that they use if they ever get separated…and this is one of them…if I remember correctly, this one means…she is going to the way that the petal pointed…okay…so she is going left!

Just when I thought of that…

“Kyaaaaaa!”

I heard a scream…its Eris!

Wait for me Eris! I’m going there!

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'Ah…shit…this is bad…'

'who would’ve thought that a behemoth would appear in the 6th floor!'

I manage to kill all the rat demons that was trying to attack Eris but…a behemoth?! Really?!  What are you doing here behemoth! Do your job on the lower floor! Don’t go up!

'Shit…this is really bad…'

but,

'I have to do this…'

With a really low voice…I whisper

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