Draft 1: Unpopular Mae’s Struggles to being an Unattainable Flower.
Synopsis:
Mae Kurosawa is a sixteen-year-old high school girl at Kamigawa high school. Kamigawa-high, being known as a prestigious school, the students have established rankings via popularity votes amongst the female students. The top ranking students are battling for the annual ‘Takane no Hana’ title which is being held by the Top1 popular student. Mae, being within the lowest of the rankings, don’t really mind being at the bottom and just wanted to continue a peaceful life within her club.
One day, a junior first year Ryuuji Shirogane applied to join her club with only one goal in his mind: to make Mae rise her rankings and make it to the top rankings, and ultimately, battle for the ‘Takane no Hana’ Title!
Characters:
Mae Kurosawa (16)(F)
One of the most unpopular students of Kamigawa-high, She just wanted to have a peaceful life until Ryuuji applied to her club and asked her to pursue top rankings and battle for ‘Takane no Hana’ title. Having no experience with romantic relationship ever since, she finds herself gradually being attracted to Ryuuji and eventually starts to fall in love. Will this be a reason for her to pursue popularity rankings?
Ryuuji Shirogane (15)(M)
A freshman at Kamigawa-high. Meeting Mae accidentally at the entrance, he founds something within the unpopular girl that ignited the talent he’s possessing. That day he applied to the Occult club and confessed his reasons to Mae: to have her reach the top rankings and battle for ‘Takane no Hana’ title. His persuasiveness eventually influences Mae and he started experiencing things he haven’t experienced before.
Ria Shirogane (17)(F)
The current holder of the title ‘Takane no Hana’ and Ryuuji’s older sister. Being the daughter of a famous model and a stylist, she has been well-known since her first year and has been holding the title for almost three years. Having told by Ryuuji that he will make Mae reach the top rankings and battle the title slot, out of trust of Ryuuji’s skills, she challenged Mae to see if she can really reach the top rankings and snatch the title away from her before graduating.
Chieri Amatsuki (15)(F)
Ryuuji’s childhood friend and has been harbouring romantic feelings for Ryuuji ever since they’ve been friends. Entering Kamigawa-high the same time with Ryuuji, she immediately makes it to top 10 of the rankings because of her extreme cuteness. She will be one of the opponents Mae have to beat, in rankings, and in stealing Ryuuji’s heart.
Ozzy (17)(M)
The club president of the occult club. Best Bro, God Support, no need to explain.
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“Uhm, Fred… I really don’t think this will be approved by the Old Man.” Ara said.
The Team Maou, consisting of Fred, assistants Ara and Kyrie, and Landlady Ingrid who’s tagging along to help is having a meeting at joint studio unit 6 and 7. Aside from having crumpled papers all thrown everywhere there are also junk food, cup noodles, energy drink and soda. It’s the super unhealthy starter pack for neet junkies.
“Humu, how should I rate this, Freddy-doo? This could be something that will go on for 6-7 volumes if you’re consistent. I hope you won’t get axed at volume 3.”
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“Fred I really think this isn’t something that can compete with the oneshot that led you to your beginner award. First of all, the story is pretty much generic. There’s this unpopular girl, then there’s this multi-talented male. And what’s with this hyper generic childhood friend that will be left out at the end of the story?”
As Kyrie and Ingrid followed up, Fred started scratching his head. It has been a week since Fred have decided to write a shoujo manga and he has been racking his brain ever since for ideas for a plot.
“Any suggestions guys? Tell me of ways I could improve this.” -Fred
Like storm winds, suggestions came hitting him while being out in the open.
“Humu, let’s see… How about adding fight scenes?”
“Please stop adding childhood friend third wheels.”
“You see you see, there’s this shoujo manga that I have been reading, and there are two factions within the school. Then there’s the white faction male and a dark faction female. Then there are heads per faction. Then they fall in love with each other. Then they hide their relationship despite their factions being mortal enemies.”
“Okay okay, stop there… That really sounds too similar to my gang war one shot, where have you even bought that…”
“Humu, add missiles!”
“Please remove drama tag.”
“AAAAAHG!!! FUCK! Please, stop!! ”
“Humu, add this witch traveller from a novel I’ve been reading. A cameo will be fine”
“Stooooop!! Who even said that last sentence??”
“Kyrie diiiid~~”
“You see, the suggestions you are saying will make this look like a shounen! Do you really want me to draw a ninja or a swordsman or an expanding rubber man?!”
Jokes aside, Fred is tired. Besides racking up his brain for a week, he’s been researching shoujo manga drawing styles and have been practicing. Having this conversation is already taking a heavy toll on his mental health.
“Please, give me just a few weeks. I can draw a one-shot for this but please let me also draw the whole volume one. Please bear with me on this draft.”
The three fell silent. They knew Fred is serious and determined.
“Okay then I’ll help you out… But you see, give me a copy of volume of this~~” Ara switched to aneki-mode and teased Fred by slowly whispering to his ear.
“Yikes! Stop! Okay okay, I’ll give you one… Wait you being my assistant means you will know how the story will go.”
“Humu, I’d love to see where the story goes. You seem determined to complete a volume.”
“You can’t do that Fred, showing us something as completely lacking as this, then showing that determined face you once had on your award-winning one shot.”
As the three of them agrees, Fred’s painful expression became calm. Knowing the three of them will support him on this first draft is more than enough of a drive for him.
“A week for seven chapters… Won’t this be rushed?” Asked Ara
“We have Kyrie.” Ingrid answered
“Humu, this genius of a twin-drilled gothic Lolita will amount to a few more person worth of help. Count me as seven people helping you.”
“Good, then we’re set.”
“I Promise I’ll cook you your favourite beef stew once you’ve completed it as a reward.” Ingrid concludes.
“That doesn’t count much of a help.”
“Also, suggestion here, Mae Kurosawa will be needing one female friend that is also at the bottom rankings as her and her role should be stopping Mae from advancing further to the top ranking battles and live a peaceful normal life like she used too...”
b!choose shiori | chieri
BatsuBOTToday at 7:06 PM
:thinking: | Kyrie4asdSOBOREDme, I pick shiori!
b!choose amakuza | amatsukaze
BatsuBOTToday at 7:07 PM
:thinking: | Kyrie4asdSOBOREDme, I pick amatsukaze!
“Humu, Shiori Amatsukaze indeed.” Said kyrie as they looked at her laptop.
“What you could do those at the internet?” Ingrid was amazed.
“Humu, want to join my online community? Just install Disbored on your pcs.”
“Seriously, you rely on bot for name generation?” Fred just scratched his head. “Okay then, I don’t think the name could affect the story anyways. Let’s just used that.”
And with the conclusion, their meeting for Fred’s draft finally ended.
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Shiori Amatsukaze (16)(F)
Mae’s closest friend at the occult club. She’s also one at the bottom ranks that have influenced Mae to drop battling for popularity rankings and live a peaceful life instead. She will try her best to get in the way of Mae and Ryuuji as she drags Mae back to the life of peace and listlessness.