Let Me Explain!:
I recently ran into some free time and decided to watch a show I heard of. This show being Tonikaku Kawaii / Fly Me to the Moon / Tonikawa: Over the Moon for You. A nice and wholesome romance where the couple gets married before they even start dating? Well, that's a unique and interesting premise. Hopefully they executed it well.
Well, now I've seen all 13 episodes of the first season and looked up some extra info online. So, was the show any good?... That's actually not as simply a question as you might think. You see, there are some really cute, mature, and well done moments throughout this show. However, for every second the show isn't being good, it's being incredibly stupid, poorly paced, and annoying. (For those of you who have read ahead, yes, I did just reference a chapter I haven't written yet. I like to think ahead)
So, this is the moment I leave this dumb, regular anime behind and get back to normal, right? Well, if I were a viewer, I'd view. If I were a rater, I'd rate. But, I'm a writer and I write. That's all I can do, is think of ways to write something better.
That said, here we are. Tons of ideas of how to make this romance better and just one way to show them (That I know of).
If you've ever read any of my previous works, you might be thinking "Don't you do Sci-Fi, Fantasy, and Adventure stuff? What are you doing with Romance?" Well, faithful viewer, whenever I'm not thinking about any of those genres, Romance is where my mind turns to. So, I was particularly upset to see this romance being handled so poorly when it should be something that I, in theory, like.
"Why remake this show? It can't be That bad."
... Okay. If you don't want to hear a lot of complaints about the above series as it exists, just skip down to "COMPLAINTS OVER." Got that?... Good.
A Plantation of Gripes:
I'm going to begin at the first thing that canonically happens in the series as a whole and not at the actual start of the series.
A super long time ago, this 16 year old girl gets a death illness in her and her dad gets an eternal life potion, gives it to her, and burns it for some reason. Bet you didn't expect that out of this show, did you? I think we can all tell why destroying an eternal life potion is stupid, so let's move on.
Next, people start figuring out that Tsukasa, the girl, will live forever. At the realization of this, they decide to eat her flesh to get some of that for themselves, which is a little drastic of a conclusion and one that I find hard to believe that people would really go through with.
Anyway, this leads to her killing people in order to survive. Eventually, her combat experience leads her into politics and influencing Japan for countless years. What issues could I have with that? Well, you know how politics are a very public set of affairs? This should mean that Tsukasa, also being countless years old, should be the most famous person in all of Japan, if not the world, right? Right. So, how about instead just nobody knows who she is anywhere?
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Also, Japan was likely not that inclusive of women in politics at the time. Let alone a woman who looks like she's 16 years old.
She should also be the richest person, but whatever.
This takes us to my biggest area of disbelief. You see, we are meant to believe that Tsukasa, being literally 1400 years old at this point, is not only a perfectly pure virgin, but that she has never ever been romantically involved with anyone ever before...
Excuse Me?!! You're expecting me to just believe that this Human woman does not have a sex drive, romance drive, nor even a need for basic male companionship? I'm a Christian man and I can tell you that I have all of those things for women, because it's Normal! Existence alone can get pretty lonely, so we drive ourselves towards one-another to both spend existence together and to fulfill our need to love someone else.
I understand that people literally ate her body and that she probably had some trauma to go through, but it's been 1400 years. People get over trauma and seek companionship. My only realistic explanation for her purity goes beyond the bounds of the series' universe.
I think that the author both wanted a wholesome, sweet Romance and a cool, edgy mythological series and just clunkily threw the two ideas together without thinking about it.
That said, why does she now just decide to marry a random guy before dating him despite all her divine purity and traumas? No idea. They tried to explain it, but Tsukasa says during the explanation that she has no clue why she did it. I can only guess that Nasa was literally the first guy she ever found charming. Ugh!
So, yeah. Pretty much the entire foundations for the show are poorly thought out messes that make for a lot of brain pain if you think about them... This is a Rom-Com, by the way...
...Also! Chitose, And Her Maids, Can Suck A Fat-
COMPLAINTS OVER:
That all laid out there, what exactly is a "Redo?" What do I intend on doing with this series? Well, I'm going to use several of the elements from the series to create a story that's much more in line with what I originally wanted. No, this is not a remake. It might as well be a new series with the same characters, which is something I'd like to do with other series later on.
Will I include Chitose? Yes. But, only if I get to writing the second of four special episodes after the main series is over.
Will I change the characters? You bet I will. But, only in ways that I think make them better, if they need to be better at all.
Don't I have anything better to do? No, and I don't mean that in a sad way. I mean that doing this is important to me for some reason. Maybe just because I want to see a good romance series out there. But, if something is important to you, then what better thing could you do?
I'd like to leave on that nice sentiment, but I'd like for you to know what I'll do after this.
1st. Star Fight Act 2 writing completion
2nd. Sonic Chronicle 2
3rd. Naruto Redo: Working Title Season 1
That said, enjoy this bizarrely brought about idea!