Overall:

-Dialogue: Make dialogue flow better and more natural

-Descriptions: Make more specific in some sections, more imaginative in others

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-Rework Iradel's description

-Rework Zerital's description

-Rework Wyrm's Perch/Aria description

-Characters: Revisit early Trenton, Kiva, Millie, Raligoth, and overall Karfice characterization

-Scenes: Give some sections more room to breathe; expand or make some fights more unique

-Revisit Wyrm's Perch escape sequence

-Revisit storming of salamander temple

-Revisit Chapter 81: Tower of Wonders