Short Chapter it's just that i was hopping to make the next one just about the quest. Still I think this one is interesting and points to some of my writing difficulties so if you find something bad and have a solution comment on it ^^ Both about writing methods and structure... like tables... really teach me how to make some, pls, pls, pls... (imagine a pet with big shinning eyes looking at you).
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After a blinding light, Felix appears in the middle of a city square full with people animatedly talking in groups.
Massaging his eyes to get rid of the pain, from the light, Felix moves his body around, trying to understand how he came from that strange machine to be standing in this place.
With unfocused eyes Felix walks to a fountain, and sits on a bench, right next to it.
At his side is an old women that seems to be feeding birds.
Closing and opening his eyes, the world starts to take a shape and Felix is happy that he can finally see what’s around.
The square is surrounded by dirty white buildings, most with up to second floor, but no more than four floors. Being the first floor generally occupied by a storefront.
In the north side of the square there lies a cathedral with massive cone like towers surrounding a dome like main structure. Behind its back, Felix can see cylindrical and squared towers belonging to buildings hidden from his view. Then to the south Felix sees a massive white wall that seems to be at least 15 meters high and extends to both sides until his eyes can’t see, but he could guess it to surround the city.
Not quite able to close his mouth, Felix notices the people in groups, most of them dressed in the same fashion, brown breeches and white shirt with a dagger, a cantle and a bag tied to their belts.
He then remembers the voice and how he was supposed to be entering a game, but hadn’t he chosen an unknown species? Immediately he looks at himself, and notices he too is wearing such clothes and items. He then looks at the water’s surface attempting to see his reflection, it isn’t perfect, but what he sees is his body, except the eyes, there seems to be something wrong with his eyes, they emanate a soft green glow and when he bows for a closer look he notices they have a feline look, he then opens his mouth like he had seen in monster movies, most of the times the first thing to change were the teeth, so he checks his, and there is something outside normal, he now has an extra pair of canine teeth, two extra sharp looking ones.
Sitting straight in the bench, thinking about how he felt about the changes, he looks at the old woman at his side, now that things look sharper he notices how wrinkled and dry her face is. Yet her humming voice sounds pleasant to his hears like a lullaby a mother would sing for her baby’s sleep. The old woman attention was in the birds eating the pieces of stale bread she was throwing on the ground. Strange birds with multi-coloured feathery coats, round beaks, slits for eyes and devil like horns.
-Calm down Beck, let the others eat, I brought enough.
The old woman says to a particular large birdie that would often bite others for the food.
-They are pretty aren’t they? –old woman.
“Is she speaking to me? I wouldn’t say they are pretty, at least the big one is horrible, reminds me of something I would expect to see in a place like hell.”
-Ehm… they have some qualities… I guess.
-Yes they have. Did you know that revoh only exist in the City of Seasons? It is said that this city’s First Lord loved his people so much that when his time came he gave his life force to create the first revohs, ordering them to protect this city and its people till the end of time. –old woman.
-Centuries after the revohs were considered divine beasts, and those chosen by them would be called the City of Seasons’ Protectors, and were given a set of skills to use in their duties guarding the city form both inside and outside dark influences. –old woman.
-And yet no one seems to look at them now. – Felix.
“Why am I talking to this crazy old woman? I should be findin out what I am supposed to do here.”
-Kekeke, reason you have young man. For the last 100 years no one has been chosen by one of the revoh, and now they are seen as no more than mindless birds, but that I would guess is about to change. Is it not, young chosen? –old woman.
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“Hu, chosen what is she talking about.”
Felix thinks, before he notices that some height has been added to his right shoulder. Looking to the side he sees himself face to face with one of the birds the old woman was feeding.
The bird looks him in the eyes and screams a shrill cry making him jump back, ending up wet to his neck, after stumbling in the fountain.
All around him people are laughing and he feels his cheeks get warm, up until the bird that he had just dislodged from his shoulder decides to land in his head causing a window to open:
One among the renohs has chosen you to be a Protector of the City.
New companion added.
Please name your companion.
-Well should I call you ChikenSoup?
Asks Felix to the bird, only to see it jumping from his head to his hand to bite one of his fingers.
-Outch!
Companion refuses given name.
Please name your companion.
-Dam bird! Outch!!
Companion refuses given name.
Please name your companion.
-Bloody bird! Outch!!!
Companion refuses given name.
Please name your companion.
-Ok, ok…wait…
“What name do I give this damned thing? Let’s see does it have anything beautiful about it? No. Well maybe the coat… the way it starts with a dark blue and starts getting green till the tail…”
-I will call you Wave. Cause when the wind passes through your coat it reminds me of an ocean wave traveling from the deepest waters to the bay.
Companion accepts the name.
Voice Pet Stats: Wave to consult your pet’s stats and skills.
-Pet stats.
Name: Wave Species: Revoh
Level: 1
Health: 135 Mana :70 HealthRegen: 1/sec ManaRegen: 0.7/sec
Stamina: 115
Strength:7 Agility:13 Dexterity:10 Vitality: 10
Wisdom:7 Intelligence:7 Luck:16
Affinities:
Wind 40% Wind Res
Water 10% Water Res
Earth 10% Earth Res
Skills:
Head-butt: Descends from a high place down to the adversary, using horns for extra damage 10% damage on impact. 5% chance of knockback and shock.
Scream: Uses high pinch scream that terrorizes weaker adversaries, and causes taunt on stronger ones.
Wind Slash: Sends a blade of wind that will slash anything in its way. Consumes all mana and stamina.
“Ok, now it starts looking like a game, if only now I could find out, how I find my own stats, or maybe even how to go back home… Still remembering from when I was a kid and played old games, this fellow seems pretty nice for a companion. I can already see some uses for it.”
-She sure seems to like the name.
Comments the old woman, reminding Felix where he was.
-Tell me young man would you like to become officially one of the protectors? –old woman.
-Sure, if it helps me understand more about this place and makes me stronger. –Felix
“It’s not like I can do anything else, let’s go along with the crazy lady and bird and hope something comes up.”
-Then you must pass the trial. –old woman
-Which trial and where do I start it? -Felix
-I can give it to you, but young man it won’t be easy. –old woman
-It never is.-Felix
-I can give it to you, go to the First Lord’s mansion in the back of the palace and bring me a black feather. –old woman.
Ding*
City of Seasons Protector
The crazy old woman that feeds the revohs in the fountain square offered you a chance to join the ancient order of Protectors. All you have to do is fetch a black feather from the Frist Lord’s house.
Quest Rank: G
Reward: Intimacy with Wave rises. City of Seasons Protector title, job offer and skill set.
Failure: Wave might decide to leave you alone. City of Seasons Protector title, job offer and skillset unable in the future.
Accept || Refuse
“Why not?”
-I will fetch you the feather woman.