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As I woke up from my sleep and check that it is only 5 o’clock in the morning. Then I went to wash my face and brush my teeth. After that I change my clothes and go for a morning jog.
When I open the door and go outside, the sky was still dark. Well that is to expect since it is still only 5.10 in the morning.
‘Ah, the morning air feels nice, there is also the breeze.’
Then I started to start jogging.
‘Hmm.. What should I make for breakfast.. I think I will make egg with bread and milo. Oh yea, the capsule will be arriving today. I hope it will arrive before the afternoon.’
Then I went to the supermarket to buy the eggs that I will need for breakfast. On my way to the supermarket, I met my school friend, Keane in the park. So we ended up chatting.
“Hi, Keane. You up and early I see.”
“Well you the only one who did not change, waking up so early in the morning.”
“It is always good to wake up early. Anyway, today is the day the capsule will be arriving.”
“Yeah, because I am very excited about I wake up early and can’t go back to sleep so I came here to have a walk. Anyway what are you doing?’
“Oh I am going to buy eggs for my breakfast. See ya later.”
“How about we meet up in the game? How does that sound.”
“Hmm… Ok. So where should we meet up and what time?”
“We will meet up in the Sehal Kingdom, in the central; you will find a fountain there. The time will be real world 12 o’clock. So we shall see each other in the afternoon.”
“Ok, see you later. My eggs are calling me.”
(-_-)” ‘Your eggs…..’ (-_-)”
After running, I when back home and prepare breakfast. Since I don’t know when will they deliver the capsule. I started doing chores like washing clothes, sweep the floor, mop the floor, wipe wthe window, etc. Ding dong….. I heard my doorbell rang while I was sweeping the floor.
‘Oh, I wonder if it is the capsule.’
I when to open the door and see three men dress in blue.
“Hello, how may I help you?’
“Yes, good morning sir. I am Dan. And these two are Amil and Amin. We are here to install the capsule.”
“Oh, right this way please.” Then I lead them to my room and ask them to put it near the desk.
After they are gone I took a shower first then only I went to the capsule and play the game.
When I got inside the capsule, everything went dark and a voice says
“Do you wish to connect to Arvan World?”
Startled, I look around but only find darkness. So i reply with a yes
Then the sound say something again.
“The scan on iris and vein determine you are an unregistered player. Do you wish to make a new account?”
Wondering where the voice come from but there is nothing i can see so i reply with another yes.
After a second later, i find myself in a white space.
Then came the voice again.
“What would your character name be?”
“Xan” I reply
“Do you want to be a male, neutral, or a female?”
“I would like to stay male”
‘what is neutral?’ I wonder.
“There is over 200 races but you can only choose the starting 3 races, that are human, elf and dwarves.”
‘Hmm, human, elf and dwarves. I wonder which should I chose?’
“Can you give me the attribute of each race?”
“Sure, wait for a moment.”
HumanThe most balance race. Can learn almost anything. All stat start with 10.
ElvesA race that is more focuses on magic and speed.
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This does not have a lot of strength.
You can also choose among 3 sub race. Such as wood elves, night elves, and high elves.
DwarvesA race that is a lot shorter than human.
This race has more strength.
This race has low magic affinity.
This race is good with blacksmith.
‘Magic and speed sounds nice, but has lowest strength amongst these 3 races. And dwarves are shorter than human; it is likely to be shorter than me. No, I do not want to be short. Dwarves also have low magic affinity. I mean who would not want to try out magic like shooting a fireball from your hand. I guess I will go with the human, it is said that human can learn almost anything.’
“Human would be good”
“You may alter your appearance as you like.”
Then an image pop out in front of me.
The image has a pair of black pupils, black hair that is not long but also not short but fit him, and has a decent build body. Which, in my eyes that there were too many fats.
"Make me shorter by 1 cm."
“Is this ok?” Reply the voice after he makes the changes.
“Add a few streak of silver to the hair. Also make my pupils jet black.”
“Ok, applying changes. Done, is this appearance fine with you??”
“Make my hair another 1 cm longer.”
“Also make my hair a bit, a little bit more spiky.”
“Is this to your taste?”
‘When did the AI start to use more complicated words?’
“Hmm…” Staring at the image for a while then say “It’s OK”
“Do you wish to play the tutorial?”
“No, thanks”
“Where do you wish to start?”
“Sehal Kingdom”
And with a flash of light, i appear in Sehal kingdom.
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Meanwhile, somewhere on the keigh plains an exploration team from Sehal Kingdom is there to exterminate the goblins there.
“Captain, the scouts have reported a group of 5 goblins. What are your orders captain?”
“Alright, send the scouts ahead and scout for more goblins in case of reinforcement. And use one or two men to lure the goblins here. Tell everyone to find a place to hide. We will ambush them.
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Triying this out...OMGODthis isextremelyreallyHARDGoing to get the hangof it
testing testing 123
now that i know it, it is not as hard as it use to be.:sillyp1: