This is my first time writing FF and i would love feed back on the quality of my writing as well as the quality of the story.
i would also love if you guys gave ideas for future events to happen to her.
6 years till release
connecting.... error error
-huh whats going on?
welcome to royal ro... error
-where is this?
select rac# *@&A# error
-where did the fox go?
select starting lo@#(!*$ error
-i wanted to play with it in the forest.
error error NPC creation st($#%^g F0rrrrst ban%#! hideout
Artemis woke up underneath a great tree in the middle of a grove. Looking around she can see bunny's hopping about at the edge of the clearing by the forest.
welcome to the starting tutorial please say stats window
-what? um stats window
in front of her vision a window appears
Status WindowNameArtemisPrimary ClassN/Aracefox demonHealth100Mana100Level1Health Regen/Sec1.0Mana Regen/Sec1.0Strength10Agility30Wisdom10Intelligence10Stamina30Vitality10Dexterity30
please say invintory
-umm inventory
* 10 rye bread
* canteen
please say close
-close
thank you for completing the tutorial
-wait what am i suppose to do!
she yelled out trying to get an answer as to where she is and what she is suppose to do. Unsure she decides to sit down and think about how she got there. She went into a room to get the fox out of it so she could play with it, Then she was in a white room and then she woke up in a forest.
-hmmmm... wait a minute fox demon?
She looked down at her hands and saw that they where elongated and her nails curved into a sharp claw.turning around to look at her butt and a snow white tail greets her as it gently sways back and forth. Reaching up she feels her ear are pointed and furry grabbing her hair instead of brown it is white as well. Being ten she did what any ten year old would do and started screaming.
rabbit paralyzed in fear x 2.
rabbit takes fatal damage x 2
level up
skill learned: demon howl
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-huh...what bunnies?
As she looks around 2 small bunnies turn to dust leaving meat and rabbit furs. She walks over and the most delicious smell is coming from the meat. Unable to stop her self she quickly picks up the meat and eats it. Surprising her self the rabbit meat was the best thing she has ever eaten. Looking around her she sees that the rabbits are allover the field a buffet of all you can eat meat. Unable to contain her self she goes into a hunting frenzy completely giving her self over to base instinct.Using her claws she moved through the grove like the wind dealing death to all bunnies that dare get in her way. an hour and sever dozen dead bunnies latter she starts to pack up all the furs and rabbit meat in her back pack. Standing up to to stretch she remembered she got some thing called demon howl.
-show skills
demon howl: A deathly screech that makes your prey unable to move from fear. May damage randomly.
-show inventory
* 10 rye bread
* canteen
* 48 rabbit furs
* 33 rabbit meats
she now had plenty to eat and only had to worry about water.but before that she remembered a it said she leveled up
-show stats
Status WindowNameArtemisPrimary ClassN/Aracefox demonHealth230Mana180Level7Health Regen/Sec1.6Mana Regen/Sec1.2Strength27Agility49Wisdom13Intelligence16Stamina50Vitality21Dexterity38
She wasn't sure but she though she was doing well.After calming down she took stock of her situation. Things she knew one she was not human, two she was not on earth probably, and third rabbits are seriously delicious. Next she decided to find a lake or river, while rabbit blood tasted fine she didn't want to chase one down every time she needed a drink.
- bye bye bunnies thank you for the food!
She called out as she walked away from the grove and into the forest. walking for about ten minutes she came upon a group of small red foxes. she stopped in her tracks fearing them, while stopped they turn to her and stare...thinking about it she suppose to be a fox. taking a chance she calls out
-Mister fox would you know where to find some water?
-but of course little one if you don't mind following me i will take you there now.
Startled by the talking fox she fell over causing the group of foxes to giggle at her.
- not use to walking on two legs yet i see
-huh um what do you mean mister fox
-well its not every day a pup is turned and my name is Itsu and do not worry it wont be long till you get back into the swing of thing now lets head over to the stream
Following Itsu the fox Artemis walks across a small trail all the while feeling like something is watching her unable to shake the feeling she arrives at a small stream, Bending over she drinks deeply from it before filling her canteen. Still unable to shake the feeling of being watched she turns her ears to the forest around her.
-see a stream as promised
- um mister Itsu do feel any thing strange around
- i don't we are completely safe here
heightened senses:passive
keeping your senses probing the surrounding area you can now detect enemy's withing ten meters
Just then 2 wolves charge out of a nearby bush and tackle Itsu grabbing him from his head and hind legs they pull him apart.Seeing this Artemis lets out a howl of terror.
wolves paralyzed in fear x 2
Artemis quickly takes off running for her life only getting a few dozen meters before the wolves are after her