Jesus Christ this was bad. I'll restart. Five years I left this here. Dear God I'm sorry.
The story had potential I just didn't like what I did so I'm gonna restart but leave this disaster for future reference to myself . It's not like the idea over all was terrible. It's just my Grammer skill killed it and I can't properly describe scenarios. I think my strong suit is duologue but even then it all sounds like a 15 year old wrote it in an angst. Which was almost the case.
I got distracted by life stuff and forgot about this site. I started a comic series that I never finished because of other life stuff. And I gave on it for roughly the same grammar problem with this one.over all I'm more an artist then a writer. Which sucks.
Cause I have good ideas, just can't execute them. Like to break down what I wanted I wanted to show not tell. Like Laura=Lee. Wasn't supposed to be as long as it was. And I didn't mean Lee to seem dumb/overly friendly like I had. And I thought of the other reps. But it felt I gave away too much. I couldn't build up what I wanted. But this "book" is pretty much just a Big draft done by a rookie writer. I'm happy that people had given me help with my Grammer and given me tips at the start. But I also never took the story all that seriously. Which showed.
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Thought looking back in it after all this time. I feel like. Danm. I couldn't have done so much better than this. Like WAY better.
Sorry it's a lot of rambling but I need to ramble for about another 300 characters other wise I can't post this.
Like now that I even see my physical notes from five years ago I saw what I was trying to do. And now that I have a better understanding of what I wanted. I can start from that. Not like I expect it to be a hit. It realistically won't be. But the idea is still good. Sins picking seven candidates for a survival game with ticking bombs attached to them. Working together, betraying each other, loosing themselves to the sins they're representing as that slowly loose the humanity and identity.
Like that sounds great. But it was an idea too complicated for me at the time to do.
not to mention the internal drama that I have no real life experience with, and trying to put to paper only to realize it sounds like a scene pulled out of an early 2000's manga or worse modern general hospital. But now that I know source like the freaking Internet and the real people I based the sins on can give me the spice I need for this flavor less book. So hopefully I can post the new version soon before another five years pass.
Sorry for the ramble thank you