Thank you very much for your review/advices/critics/encouragements! as a novice writer, i really need those, especially critics. i know, my jokes are mostly lame... so i'm pondering, should i give the previous chapters a revamp, and make the story to be more serious + in 3rd person view, like this chapter? or should i left it be?
if the story is revamped, the plot still wont be changed, but it will be in 3rd person view, and most likely, the MC will be less retarded... and no more lame jokes xD it will be more serious, like coiling dragon-ish. please give me your opinion
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One year before the event of the main story.
“Our master want you to kill Prince Cocoa of the Choco Empire.”
One day, a messenger from the Cream Empire suddenly came with a request from the Emperor himself to La Mierda, one of the best underworld organization in the whole world.
The elders of La Mierda, upon hearing the request, couldn't help but feel shocked by that.
“What is the purpose of this request, young man?”
“I am sorry, but that is a classified information...”
“Then I am afraid, we couldn't accept your request either. The risk is too much.”
The messenger could only nod his head in dejection, since he himself didn't know anything about that information. Knowing that he will be unable to gain anything even if he stayed for a longer time, he decided to go back to the Cream Empire and gave the report to his superior.
Few weeks later...
Inside the main hall of La Mierda, a middle-aged man wearing a light-brown colored elegant robe, embedded with many ornaments, stood in front of the elders while letting out an air of dominance.
“We can't, Your Majesty. Your Majesty knew it very well that Choco Empire is the territory of Polca, one of the 13 Exas. Only people with the same power level, like Your Majesty, could stand toe to toe with him. Others couldn't even hope to inflict some damage to him.”
The elders, even if they are still insisted on refusing the request, but they didn't dare to act rude toward the guest. Because right now, the one they are facing right now is none other than the 17th Emperor of the Cream Empire, and one of the 13 Exas, Cream de Magnum IX!
After pondering for a while, Magnum IX tried to give a suggestion to the elders.
“Can't you guys just sent Chaos to deal with Polca? He's still count as your member, right?”
Hearing the name 'Chaos', the expressions of the elders couldn't help but somewhat turned sour.
“That brat... that brat is a lost cause. We didn't even know where he is right now, and we have no mean to contact him. He didn't even come to the HQ for the last 50 year!”
Unable to bear his frustation, one of the elder shouted in resignation. Hearing that, the other elders gave a nod, while Magnum IX frowned.
“Fine, I will leave for now, but I will come back later. And if somehow you had succeeded in locating Chaos' whereabouts, immediately contact me.”
“Yes, Your Majesty.”
With that, Magnum IX turned into a brown blur and flies back to the Cream Empire.
***
In the peak of a certain mountain, in the Southern Continent.
A man in his thirties, is currently meditating silently. Within 100 meter radius, with him in the center, everything is frozen.
(note : he just look thirties, his actual age is more than that)
A bluish aura could be clearly seen surging out of his body, which is covered with beads of sweats. After a long time has passed, the man opened his eyes.
“Success.”
That man is Chaos, one of the 13 Exas, and the strongest member of La Mierda. Nobody knows his real age, only that his appearance hasn't changed for several hundred years. Even the current elders didn't know, how long it has been since Chaos first joined La Mierda.
“With this, now my power have reached Zetta-level. Bit by bit, I am slowly reaching his level. Just you wait, just you wait, asshole...”
“Waiting for what?”
“.........!!”
Caught off by the sudden appearance of the unknown voice, Chaos couldn't help but casted multiple protection spells and immediately shoot up to the sky. He had never imagined that there is someone who could sneak up without him noticing.
“Who are you! Show yourself, or I will blast you together with this mountain!”
“Oh come on, I was just joking. Surely you didn't mind it?”
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The unknown voice actually answered and could be heard directly behind his back.
'Don't tell me, he actually have the same..... no, higher level of speed than me!?'
Chaos immediately turned around and used one of his Exa-level spell to blast out whoever it is that's floating behind him. But then, he saw nothing.....
“MISS! Hahaha!”
“Che!”
At once, Chaos increases his speed and became a black blur and flies around the mountain. Up, down, right, left. But even then, he could still hear the unknown voice said something like “Trolololololol” and “Nyahahaha” behind his back.
Frustated, he decided that he would use his strongest move to end this madness. Gathering all of the mana around him, the whole mountain suddenly is covered by countless circles of bluish light.
“Crap, don't do tha—!”
“SNOW HALATION!”
Chaos shouted the spell name at the top of his lung, and he immediately turned his body around to see... a frozen body of a youth.
“Not so funny anymore huh? How about I cleanly split your body into two different parts, and let's see if you could still laugh anymore.”
Right after he said that, Chaos once again turned into a black blur and goes past the youth's frozen body.
“— Lag —“
*Swish*
No effect.
“Huh? What the, just then, I definitely cut his body...?”
Confused, Chaos tried his move for the second time.
*Swish*
No effect.
“What the fuck?”
“Haha, it's useless, your mind has been affected by my skill. Let's go down to the mountain.”
The youth's frozen body suddenly disappeared, and in the place it was before, a black haired youth with two different eye color, stood in mid-air. The youth then, once again, vanished and instantly appeared down in the peak of the frozen mountain.
Soon, Chaos immediately followed him down.
***
“That was just overkill, Chaos. Everytime you choose to use your Snow Halation, you just had to kill every single living things around you...”
“It's not your business. What do you want from me?”
Still suspicious of the youth, Chaos didn't want to let his guard down.
“Wait a minute, I will fix it.... — Undo — ….”
Suddenly, everything...... goes back to normal. It seems as if the battle that had happened just then was nothing but an illusion. Wide-eyed, mouth hanging open, Chaos could only stared at the youth, dumbfounded.
“Wh-wh-what the..... this power..... are you....?”
“Ah, right, last time I met with you, I didn't use this form.”
The body of the youth instantly changed to that of a pixelated guy with only a creepy smile in his face. Yes, he is none other than the Digital God, 01!
“Fuck you, when I started to feel like I am finally getting closer to you, you just had to put me back in my place!”
“Haha, nevermind about that, it has been a long time, isn't it?”
Having confirmed the youth's identity, Chaos finally lowered his guard.
***
“Once again, I will bring someone from another world.”
Hearing that, Chaos inwardly feels shocked.
“Is that so? But why are you telling me about it?”
“Well, he need someone who could be his teacher and–“
“No.”
Having sensed about 01's plan, Chaos immediately rejected it.
“But you are the only one that I could–“
“No. I don't give a shit.”
Once again, he rejected without an ounce of hesitation!
“I see, actually, I don't want to use this method but, it can't be helped, isn't it?”
“Huh?”
“— Digital Space —“
Both of them vanished into nothingness.... for a few seconds. Then they reappeared again in the same place, and in the same position.
“I WILL DEFINITELY DO THAT. YES, I WILL BE HIS TEACHER AND MAKE HIM THE STRONGEST PERSON IN THE WORLD! NO, PLEASE LET ME DO IT!”
“Haha, fine, you really are a dependable person, Chaos.”
“HAHAHA, OF COURSE, I WOULD DO ANYTHING FOR YOU....HAHA....”
“Then I will be going first, see you later~”
After he said that, once again, 01's body dissipated into thin air.
“.........fuck.”
Thus, one year later, begin Chaos' work as a slave an apostle of the Digital God.