I ended up deciding to drop this story. It's not hitting the writing spot for me, and now that I read my work over I realise just how terrible it is.
I am posting a new work - https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/47750/time-is-of-the-essence
I think the writing is at a much better standard, and it's much more interesting for me to write.
Check it out!
Since RR deems that chapters must be 500 words long...
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
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This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
This is not a chapter, please remove the word maximum, dammit.
500.