To be honest the fiction started as a fix idea one evening, badly planned and in no
way up to standart. I told myself to release the first dew chapters and see how
or if there is a response. Since there was none i will save myself the hassle of
proffreading and go back to write for myself in my native language.
I would still appreciate some comments on what to improve though even if
i am fairly sure most will not read this.
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(Abbandon)"Sit like me and breath steadily. Empty your thoughts and feel the mana
around you."
The instructions were pretty clear but to empty your thoughts, try it yourselves,
it is super hard to hold for more than a few minutes.
(Abbandon)”Just imagine a big pool of water, you are floating in it face up. The
water is cold and serene, not a whisper around to hear. You are slowly sinking,
but you can breathe, now feel around your body. Tiny specks of light buzzing around.
Try to grab one but don't force it. Be gentle.”
POV Abbandon
She is a monster, a genuine monster it took me decades to reach what she is
accomplishing in days. She is still far off from being any higher being, but if
she keeps that speed I may still be alive to see it. She may even be.... no that
is too early to even think about.
But her talent is something else, it looks like the mana is dancing around her, as if
every speck of energy LONGS to be with her. I have never seen such a frightful thing.
The hole is currently the size of my pinky finger, all the energy she gains we use to
cultivate her soul. Only with a strong soul will she be able to brave what is to come.
The time in my prison is extremely slowed compared to the outside, I believe it is to reduce the
damage I can deal to the seal. But now it is working in our favor, it gives her time
to train and strengthen herself before the rules notice her.
I may be able to start teaching her for real very soon.
POV Mare
Call me weird but I started to like the old goof of a god, he kinda had the feel of
a grandfather watching the children play. He never scolded me or harmed me,
but his training was dreadfully hard on the mind.
The first step he said was to improve the soul, so that one can resist energy and
mind related attacks. He had me collect energy and compact and fuse it until an
ocean became a grain of dust. Then I had to absorb the grain into my very core and
then feed energy to the grain.
The time in this box is slowed he said, we have every time in the multiverse as he
proclaimed. (have to ask him what a multiverse is later)
The speck of dust has become a marble and it felt like it cannot grow bigger anymore.
He told me I need to create 6 more marbles but he would now train my mind.
GAMES! He insisted that card games are the best way to sharpen the mind, he willed
them into existence like nothing. My dropped mouth seemed to bolster his confidence
and he puffed his chest with pride. Sometimes he is really funny.
He wiped the floor with me, I had 0 chance in any game, the smiling grandfather is
a devil I am sure of it! I could not even win the luck based games. But I refuse to give
up, “I will get you old man!” I proclaimed to myself.
Time skip ????
We are still inside the seal, the hole is now so big Abby can shove his arm through.
I decided to give him a nickname, he refused at first but gave up on his protest
shortly after.
Today I finished the last marble and am close to what I DREAMED to achieve.
“checkmate” I grin like mad, I have finally WON for the first time, I lost count of
my losses. Abby wiped a small tear from his left eye, then his arms enclosed me
in a bear hug.
“Careful Abby I am fragile.” as I pat his back.
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(Abby)”Then today I will lead you on your very first step to become powerful. Look
at the marbles, they each have a color. Some may have more than one, choose one,
the more colors the better.”
Okay lets see I never really checked the colors.
Marbles:
Blue/White
Red/Green
Blue/yellow/Red
Black/White
Red/Blue/Brown/yellow
White
Black/White/Violet/Red/Blue/Brown/yellow
Blue:Water
Red:Fire
Green:Nature
White:Light
Black:Shadow
Brown:Rock
Violet:Void
Yellow:Air
His right eyelid twitched a bit as I told him of the last marble and he practically forced
me to use it for the next step.
(Abby)“Place the marble with the most colors in the middle and make it spin, it will start to
glow and create a vortex.
Then place the remaining marbles evenly around it and make the vortex grow until it
grabs all the other marbles. And then just watch.”
The vortex grew by itself and grabbed all the marbles at the same time making them rotate
around it.
Faster and faster it went. Then with a pang the marbles fused into a white glowing pyramid that
slowly rotated in my core. The resulting shock wave must have knocked me out, because as
I awoke I was sleeping in Abby's giant lap. Abby was petting my head and was humming
a melody but just in that moment my stomach had to growl, way to destroy a nice moment
filthy meat sack!
(Abby)”I welcome you in the rows of immortals, little one. Has your soul pyramid formed
correctly?”
(Mare)”Hey Abby how long was I out? And yes the weird thing formed you just never
mentioned the weird symbols it has.”
(Abby)” You were out about a decade, and the symbols are important, they are your true
name. Never tell anyone your true name, if he knows it you cannot hurt him anymore!”
(Mare)” You told me your true name! And what did you mean with immortal?”
(Abby)” Yes it is my true name, by telling you my name I have entered an unspoken pact.
It also shields you from the raw energy I emit, it was hard to not accidentally kill you
before. Whenever you mortal body may die you can reform yourself around
the pyramid. And now concentrate on the pyramid, it should be easy for you to complete
the last step.”
The pyramid rotated slowly and seemed to call me, as I came close it sucked me in, the
following feelings were the best I ever had. Complete and utter bliss awaited me.
But sadly it was short lived.
(Abby)”That little pyramid now contains your very soul. As long as the pyramid exists
the passage of time will not affect you. Attacks of the mind will be less effective and
it enables you to take the next steps in your training. Try now to eat more of the seal
you may be surprised.”
More of the seal unraveled filling my stomach, but my hunger was endless no matter
how much I ate I was not full. Then I reached the core of the spell and hungrily rammed
my metaphysical teeth in the ball of pure magic. It felt like swallowing a potato without
chewing. Suddenly the whole seal broke down.
With a giant explosion Abby shot into the air lightning sparking from his arms.
“FREEDOME” he roared.
I waited for his emotions to calm down, being tied down for so long, I can only imagine
the feelings he now had.
He sank back to me and kneed in front of me,
(Abby)”You have given me my life, thus I pledge my life to you I offer you my blessing
and swear upon the very cosmos to aid you if you call upon me.”
(Mare)”I have but one wish for you Abby, do not charge into your doom. Prepare yourself
and make sure that you survive it would sadden me to see you perish.”
I gave Abby a smile and followed the pull my body exerted. The last I saw of Abby was
the old god staring into the distance. He mumbled something and shot towards the horizon.
Time to rejoin my body and see if I can do anything to get my revenge.