Author’s Note: I like responding to comments so i’ll respond to my first Review. I agree that the “puppeteer” part had to go soon, i actually ended up moving that up as looking back it was a bit dragging on, but as a POV type story the narrators, including the Protagonist are unreliable. So even if a character thinks he’s acting a certain way because of so-and-so it doesn’t actually mean it's true. People rationalize away actions all the time. Its him the character saying its ok because it's a game, not me the author. So you're right in your review but it's not really a bad thing. He’s flawed. His actions were never meant to be seen as anything but pure evil to the readers..i made sure of that by describing how real he thought all the killing looked, no sane person, game or not could do that. Hell i can’t even be evil in game if i like the NPC even a little. Good-side storylines are always more common/popular and when the choice is given, almost always are the good sides chosen. It's only in games like skyrim where the NPCS are paper thin that you feel ok being a slaughterer.
Anyway thank you for the honest review and i hope more people can give me comments/reviews on any plot holes or writing flaws, i’ve already altered some things and future ideas based on some stuff that has been pointed out so thank you. I’ve never even written a page of fiction prior to this so criticism is great.
Authors Note: Will be in POV so thoughts are just text, italics are skills, and Character: “F is for friends who do stuff together, U is for” will represent dialogue
5,000 Words seems to be the standard chapter length i’ll be going for, so chapters will pretty much always be the same length as this one and the previous one.
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**Yue Fang POV**
I carry my headless sister’s corpse to the pyre to be burned with the rest….her h-head swinging in a sack on my belt..damn it, damn these evil bastard, damn the imperial army for not even letting me bury my sister...No..i can’t cry anymore i promised her...i promised her i’d do whatever it takes to end the existences responsible for this! I thought i was some expert reaching the middle Profound Realm at the age of 15...but i couldn’t even protect her..i should have taken her with me...put her up in a nearby city...Why couldn’t you let me spend the money, why were you always so good to me……..i was so excited to come home, to tell her how much i progressed, how my master agreed to my request of giving you a place to live...
I have to reach higher, truly become a god capable of sweeping away those treat the lives of those i care about without even a passing thought, never again, never again will i allow those i love to be taken from me! I will find those responsible for this and not a single one will survive the hell that awaits them….
**Imperial Army Officer POV**
I’ve never seen anything like it..why would such a major and powerful sect waste so many resources to raise an entire city of undead...what could they fucking accomplish with this? They even intentionally antagonized the nearby school, even then it's just a rank 9 school, how could they have anything of value?
These undead...they were fast, practically invincible if you didn’t remove their heads, even the mortal ones were deadly if you weren't careful...some of my men ended up being bitten...it was horrific watching them turn regardless of all attempts to stop it.
The only lead we have is a bounty made by an insane school headmaster that asks for a boy’s capture for questioning...there's no way some random evil cultivator at the Qi realm could even join a sect capable of this, at his age a sect this strong wouldn’t accept anything less than a High Profound Cultivator...either way we’re ordered to search for him because according to the school he was “scouting them out” ….. What could we even do if we found out the sect responsible for this other than bringing further ruin to our country?
**Sandro POV**
Heading away from the school towards the Ghoul i start running and then i find another of my follies. It hurts! It hurts so fucking bad, being the first time i ever tried running a longer distance at my full speed, no matter how fast or nimble i am if my bones can’t take it it's practically torture..why is my strength so low!
..there's no way i’m traveling like this.. I can’t exactly bring a carriage through a forest either, and i’ve never ridden a horse or whatever fucked up creatures they ride here so it’ll be awkward and painful.
Calling my ghoul over through the link and after giving away my beautiful Feather Boots
Feather Boots: By channeling Qi into the boots it allows the user to walk on air so long as Qi remains
Which are apparently a legendary like item that allows someone to simulate flying prior to the sky realm i get my ghoul to agree to my request….damn undead…..when i get more Qi i’ll make you walk a thousand miles on your hands, let's see how much you love MY boots then.
I’ve kept secret on the fact the realm i chose, Blood Soul Realm, gives a massive improvement in Evil Qi Size and efficiency, so while it’d be true if my cultivation was normal it’d still be difficult to control her even after reaching the next realm, with this...heheheh she has no chance.
My vampire has actually already resisted and escaped my previous order, so i’m guessing the 2800 Qi it cost was just because i only had 2800 left, rather than it actually working. I’ll have to keep the orders short, hopefully that ditzy vampire will believe i let her off the hook at my own will…the kneel command did work perfectly so who knows.
Getting a piggy back ride from my ghoul we head towards where Reliea is hiding in cave, probably crying.
The request which i traded the boots for is a combination of both being carried, seeing as i can’t keep anywhere near her speed and it would take years upon years to get where i want to go, and to also pretend in front of Reliea that she easily follows my orders. After talking it over with the ghoul i’ve decided to head to a higher rank city and search for and single out my necessary ingredients.
I’ve also learned some interesting information and the reason that old man never went after me that day. Evil Qi cultivators aren’t really hunt for in general. While it's true most people don’t like them for obvious reasons only rare justice loving sects ever really take any action on them so long as they don’t cause too many issues, like say…. raising an undead army and destroying a city. With my mask so long as i hide my face i won’t have to hide my Qi from anyone but that old man, however it's not like he can leave whenever he wants and he may not even remember what my Qi feels like as i was just a random low Evil Qi Realm cultivator that day.
My undead skill is also even more insanely overpowered than i thought when i explained to the Ghoul how exactly i raised the city. When she understood i was solely responsible for the army and not a minor member of a larger sect she got very quiet….yes regret your treatment of me you damn fleshing eating gorgeous monster. Ahh but don’t regret it too much i’d rather not die from you fearing my revenge, which you should.
Apparently things like raising undead, especially sentient ones is considered only possible by the highest level evil cultivators or equally strong artifacts, and even raising normal undead that functioned like mine is basically like giving a good bitch slap to the heavens, they always require some sort of artifact or talisman and aren’t able to absorb Qi from the environment or anywhere else other than an object or the cultivator himself. I mean it's true my undead take a lot of my Evil Qi, but considering what they do and what they can do they definitely get most from the environment or the things they kill.
I’ve also noticed something strange about the ghoul as if she has a minor case of bipolar, sometimes she seems excessively nice only to stop short before finishing a compliment and returning to her usual mood. The bond..it's definitely affecting her somehow, i knew my undead shouldn’t be so free willed otherwise what's the point if they could just run far away and it’d be a worthless skill. I mean sure zombies are great but they're just weak zombies nothing of any real strength.
I get off my new Ghoul Horse and approach the cave Reliea is hiding in, ignoring the cold look from my Ghoul as if she can read my thoughts i walk into the cave readying a simple stop command in my head.
**Sai Reliea POV**
Ahhh to think my master has finally come for me!! I knew he might be mad but when i felt him in danger i tried so hard to fight his order and return to him… but now he's coming to me thinking i betrayed him!! I wanted to just pretend to hunt beasts but i could never lie to master, that’d be silly. I have to face up to what i have done and just hope my master forgives me.
Running out to him i notice both master’s magnificent chaotic and vile Qi, but i also notice an Blood Qi that's even stronger than mine… Rushing out to great master i immediately bow before him. Yes Blood Qi, it's one of the things i’ve learned from the strange memories detailing how to use certain traits of my Vampiric Lineage, noo…. my master’s beautiful Lineage. Hehehe its like he’s my creator, master, lover, father all in one, ahhhh how forbidden!
Reliea: “Master i’m s-soo s-s-sorry for disobeying y-your order but when i felt you in danger i had no ch-ch-choice but to fight it”
“But by the t-time you were s-s-safe it was already too late and the order was gone, i wouldn’t dare pretend n-n-n-nor come to master when i wa-wa-was unneeded so i wa-was wa-wa-waiting h-h-hoping….”
**Sandro POV**
Once again ignoring an even colder look from my undead horse i stare at shock at my obedient undead...yes this how an undead should serve their king...i wonder why she wasn’t able to resist whereas the undead horse could, is it because the undead horse is an evolved? Then again the undead horse tried to resist even when she was the best absolute favorite cute zombie.
Dammit if i knew this was going to happen i’d have just told my horse to go do as she pleased...fuck..i can’t very well leave now and with her healing factor i doubt me and my new favorite undead could win. Hmm….i could use all of my Evil Qi to get her to hold in place..but the only reason the worked so well on my new favorite could be because she’s susceptible to it and this loyalty was the only outcome in the end.
Patting her head..
“Don’t worry my perfect creation to know you would even disobey your master in favor of your master’s safety i am quite pleased, there will be plenty of time for hunting, but for now we shall leave for Blue Fall City on the other side of this forest. You may make up for your error if you choose, by hunting along the way”
Saddling back up my undead horse, and hoping my now favorite undead, Reliea, can train fast enough to surpass my mount….ow she pinched my leg, stupid horse stop...ow ow ow fuck fuck okay okay she can somehow sense i’m insulting her, i’ll keep those thoughts away for now my ghoul.
We begin our roughly two month Journey towards Blue Fall. I ended up raising one of the rank 2 demonic beasts as a mount when i finally find one that was perfectly fluffy and had a wide enough back that i could just strap myself on while lying down. It's technically still considered a zombie so i don’t even have to order it with Evil Qi.
Raise Undead: A skill that allows you to raise recently deceased and control their souls. The type of undead and intelligence will be based on the species and cultivation level of the deceased. High Levels of the skill allow for the raising of 1(level) above your own. Mortals and Qi Realm cultivators = Zombies, Low intelligence, easy to control. Profound Realm Cultivators = Vampires, Normal intelligence, difficult to control when skill is at low levels. Rank 1 Demonic Beasts = Zombies, Rank 2 Demonic Beasts = Zombies, Error further information unavailable
Stopping to camp for our first night, Reliea actually takes out some food condensing pills she had for the previous journey into the forest. Ahhh, she can’t get anymore perfect, tonight is going my long awaiting night with a vampire. Though...she’s kinda cold and doesn’t breathe, i can’t really complain about that last part though
Looking as if she doesn’t even care as i ask the ghoul to leave, hmm you tsundere ghoul you’ll join me soon enough, well i’ll be ordering you too but close enough...
After the ghoul leaves i for go anything romantic and…
Sandro: “Put your hands up against that tree and arch your back.”
She looks at me in shock, and next sentence takes away any thoughts of fun on this trip, losing any of her original stutter or nervousness.
Reliea: “I cannot give my maidenhood to master in the middle of a forest! No my first time with master must be perfect i cannot accept anything less! We require a bed far too large for just the two of us, lillies and redbrits, the perfect scent of lavender mixed with a …..
I zone out as she lists off a endless set of needs….even if she’s completely loyal to me i guess her keeping her intelligence prevents anything that goes too strongly against her personality, and i’m too worried she’ll be able to resist my order and it’ll alter the loyalty by going against the grain.
What it's been like 10 minutes now and she still keeps going ...can this romantic even kill who i ask? Looks like i’ll have to pretend whoever i pick for my realm advancement is after my life...i lie down and go to sleep as she keeps talking...i hear the ghoul snickering in the background, oi you damn peeper what are you even doing here, to think she’d assume i’d be done by now, worst night of my life….
After Three uneventful months and some more descriptions of her perfect night followed by an uncontrollable laughter from the ghoul, we arrive at Blue Fall City and join the line to enter. Buying clean clothes for all of us from a merchant in the line we wait for our turn at the door. Even though i’m currently hiding my face i don’t bother using mimic...nicely it keeps everyone away from us.
Reliea and the Ghoul just appear as Evil Qi Cultivators so there’s no issue with them and in a city this massive, population of 500,000, 3 Evil Qi Cultivators aren’t even a blip on the radar. Christ how do they even feed them...
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Using Identity on them to check their progress over these last 3 months:
(forgot to explain, the (+50) in this case are their cultivation/racial bonuses, i'll be changing later how i show where MC puts stat points into.)
Yu LilyLevel: Flesh Realm 9/9Former Daughter of the Perverted City Lord, GhoulStrength: 1313(+150)Intelligence: 14Agility: 870(-50)Wisdom: 12Vitality: 2723(+2300)Reaction Speed: 765(-50)
Sai ReiliaLevel: Blood Realm 7/9Former Princess of Clan Fey, VampireStrength: 738(+50)Intelligence: 11Agility: 952(+100)Wisdom: 6Vitality: 2310(+1850)Reaction Speed: 10121(+50)
Apparently a lot of cultivators end up permanently stuck in the Low Profound Realm and are never in their life able to advance dieing after 2-300 years. Even more can not only never cultivate in the first place but are unable to make any real progress in the Qi Realm.
When they explained to me that reaching the high profound realm, the equivalent anyways, this quickly is faster than anything they ever heard of i could barely hide my joy imagining my future undead army.My status as a mostly non combative is sealed, once i’m sure i can trust her or atleast command her Relilia will be getting my dagger, though i have no idea what kind of skills i can get when i advance realms so who knows.
Though i can’t imagine i can ever compare to the cultivators of this world without at least taking a decade to just practice fighting. These people have been fighting and practicing martial arts since they were children...They have been dueling, fighting, killing all their lives, how can i some student from Earth fight a legitimate fight with them? Hopefully i’ll get some stronger skills with longer range, maybe some sort of barrier skill would be perfect since i’m going towards a route of mastering the use of my Evil Qi.
Currently after killing my mount my passive Qi cost is at 1800 for the Ghoul at 1400 for the Vampire…..Even worse the Vampire has started sleeping next to me at night, well only i’m really sleeping, I pretty much always wake up cold, and anything short of an order will definately not work. And with only 800 Evil Qi left there's no way i would take such a stupid risk.
Added with my Stuck 50000/50000 Exp i myself sadly am unable to make anymore progress until i complete my ritual, on that note the Ghoul can’t seem to advance either, perhaps it has to do with my own realm? Of course i didn’t tell her that and only that i’ll be able to do more for her when I advance...yes much much more but not for her but TO her. Neither of their stats can fully compete with that old man, but given both their skills they could definitely kill him together, at least is what i hope who knows what kind of skills he has, not that i really care enough to kill him anymore, i’m simply using him as a standard for my future ingredients. Blue Fall City is in another country so while i’m changing my face just in case(and maybe a little bit in honor of Poi Meng) it’s not really an issue.
Damn its 1 gold to enter for non citizens, looking at this line they must make a fuck ton of money, i’ll have to raid a city like this in the future, for now i’d rather not attack a city in a different country, no need to have the world chasing me, at least not yet. Frankly it's taking all my willpower not to raise an army of zombies and go nuts, as dumb as that decision was the pleasure of being a Undead King not leading his army as it rampages practically on autopilot is perfect.
Painfully giving Reliea 300 gold...yes 300 fucking hundred… so she can us 2 rooms and prepare for tonight. The Ghoul and Me get directions to a market so she can sell all the demonic beast corpses she has in her inventory. At least this one actually collected the demonic beast materials from her kills, Reliea telling me she couldn’t risk doing something so indecent and bloody with her master nearby…...The ghoul is definitely growing on me at this point.
Deciding to use the bond to meet up later tonight at wherever Reliea ends up at, I decide to start scoping out my targets, i’ve got several requirements this time..
First they must be 9/9 Profound Realm cultivators, preferably the stronger the better though i’m not sure if that matters. Second no members of major clans or groups, the chance that they have some sort of treasure that tells others when they die and possibly even a recording of how it happened is not something i need, not to mention what ridiculous treasures they might have on them for protection. Yes absurd treasures like that exist in this world. The third and optional requirement is for them to be poorly liked, the less people who care about their existence vanishing the better.
Which leads me to bandits or gangs, i’m hoping a city of this caliber has legitimate gangs that have members in the Profound Realm. I learned later from the Ghoul that the reason her father was able to maintain leadership of that city was because their clan once did a huge favor for the Imperial Family many generations ago. Which means it was probably someone or ones related to them that helped clear the city of undead. Makes more sense now, why someone so relatively weak ruled. Also why the city was so small and worthless, who would want to live in a city that has no power to control itself? To think i didn’t even check his background...but it does give some confidence as that golden barrier was actually a low Spirit Level Artifact.
Heading to the closest thing to a slum this city has i killed a street beggar and raise him in hopes of learning more of the gangs on the street, though i doubt he knows their exact levels.
The 7 Main Gangs are The Blue Fangs, The Red Storm, The Far Street Boys, The Eastern Suns, The MoonDogs(fuck is a moondog? It clearly isn’t something silly like i originally thought when i read the inn’s name), The Soaring Beatles(i have nothing to say about this one) and The Specters. All apparently all 2-5 profound cultivators with a high level Profound Cultivator leading them as basically a requirement to stay competitive. I learn The MoonDogs are the biggest but also most hated gang in the city with the other 6 often struggling with them. Given that they’re still operating having everyone as their enemy, that's probably the most likely place to find the strongest Profound Cultivator and my first target. Is what i would think if my wisdom was still suppressed. No matter how you look at it that can only mean one thing…
They’re definitely in the pocket of whoever runs this city handling the things he can’t or considers above himself doing. That leaves 6 gangs left on my list. The spectres sound frankly ominous, and i get the feeling the leader of the Soaring Beatles is the kind of guy i like so that leaves 4 for immediate scouting.
I learn the Eastern Sun from the beggar is the most honorable, they don’t deal in woman or sell drugs to kids, making them the safest target. A gang like that is definitely the weakest, there will always be members who disagree with such a philosophy. I kill the beggar a second time and store him in my inventory as a precaution, i learned towards the end he actually works as a scout for The Red Storm, which is how he knew so much, so no reason to leave evidence.
Calling it a night i head towards the location where i can feel the Ghoul and Reliea….i’m not sure if i’m looking forward to tonight or not. Telling the Ghoul we’ll discuss plans tomorrow i head
towards the room Reliea is in. Looking at how nice the Inn i get a bad feeling about a certain Ghoul she somehow got money from and how that's going come back to me...I mean not only do i have the whole fucking 12th floor to myself its like a royal palace…..Parts of the building are lined with a taky precious metals with random sculptures of who knows what. I open the door to a wide space. Taking off my shoes i feel a carpet that can only be described as heaven after months of being in the forest. Opening the door where i sense Reliea is i walk into a scene out of my worst nightmares….GEMSTONE, GEMSTONE FLOWERS all over the room, assortments of flowers and petals leading up to the bed that covered a slightly see-through canopy…..Nooooo she probably told i’d pay the Ghoul back later……
18++(She’s a vampire cultivator so it's not exactly vanilla but not crazy either, at least by my standards, it's also a story so it's not oozing realism.)
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I open the canopy to see her in a kneeling position on the bed wearing a light azure silk robe. Staring at her slightly glowing crimson eyes and her now almost black hair, I ignore any attempts at warming up. Without even bothering to remove her or mine clothes, i shove her onto her back and pull her legs to the edge of the bed. I open her robe and push her underwear slightly to the side opening up my way to my goal, Rubbing my thumb slightly over the opening i notice that she’s actually already wet. Perhaps sensing my surprise…
Reliea: “The truth is master i was quite worried something would ruin our night together given my special constitution so while...thinking..of master…. i made sure everything was working properly...So master as it is my first time if you could ple….”
Ignoring the rest of what she planned, i slip it slightly outside of my pants and thrust in without a care...
Giving a slight yelp and a moan her Eyes start glowing bright Crimson and she bites down on my shoulder with her fangs.
Not even feeling the pain i continued to thrust harder, with her being so much stronger than me i have nothing to hold back. Hearing fantastically muffled moans while she’s still drinking my blood with more pleasure than i can imagine, i finish far earlier than planned filling her up to brim with months of sleeping in the forest leaving my mind….
Of course with a cultivators vitality it doesn’t even take a second before i continue….
Before i lose too much blood I order her…
Sandro: “Get off you me blood addict and get on all fours, you’ll be punished for hurting your master…”
Not even feeling a slight drain of Evil Qi she gives my now bloody appearance a glance of longing before complying. Taking off my shirt i decide to give her other hole a try, using the blood still bleeding from my shoulder and the leftover liquid from her opening i stick 2 fingers directly into her second opening feeling around, the moans are far far stronger, and her body starts quivering as i put the third finger in…. No longer being able to hold on, i put it in, starting with a steady slow rhythm, i take out my dagger from my inventory because there's no way slapping her ass with my bare hands is even going to hurt, She tightens and starts moaning louder as i bring the dagger to her throat continuing my earlier pumping.
I then use the flat of dagger to hit her ass as i continue using her second opening…
Climaxing she yells….
Reliea: “Punish me harder master...i’ve been so bad making you wait, while teasing you during the nights in the forest…..”
Stopping my thrusts i flip my dagger begin slowly moving the point alongside her back….everytime i apply a tiny bit extra pressure she squeezes me tighter and her moans becoming louder as i restart my thrusting.
Breaking skin and drawing a long slow line on her back her moans become mixed with pleasurable screams as she climaxes once more.
Finishing inside her ass this time, i continue immediately, given her monstrous vitality that healed her wounds instantly i try using Drain Vitality and seeing its effects and i’m ecstatic at what she is….She orgasmed the first second, Squeezing so tight i feared for my friend, i stop and pull out. Starting Drain Vitality once more She screams in pain and ecstasy as she climaxes every amount of vitality she loses….
With her looking exhausted from repeated climaxes, i ignore the tired look on her face and instead decide to use one of the benefits of her being an undead monster…
Manually opening her mouth as she gives an exhausted but accepting look.. I shove it as far down her throat as possible while pushing her head down on the bed, ahhh there's the gurgling and choking sounds i was hoping for, I begin fucking her face telling her to suck with as much as force as she can….truly a cultivator….finishing liquid flies out depositing it in her throat…
Getting up to leave the room...she gives me a pleading look...ugh…..but she's so fucking cold…resigning to my fate i head with her into the bath, far too satisfied on both parts to do anything we head immediately to bed...hmm she’s actually pretty warm…...
Looks like the part of her that's a masochist overpowers any romantic notions, this will be a lot of fun, maybe that’s why she accepted me as her master so easily? I’m not even mad about oweing that damn ghoul money anymore...
I had tested it earlier that i don’t get any Vitality from using Drain Vitality on my undead, and it recovers soon after from using my own Evil Qi. It didn’t really affect the Ghoul this way though...
Ignoring all the bullshit decorations still surrounding me the next morning, i have to say that was one of the best sleeps i’ve had since coming to this world, the solution she found for her cold skin by circulating her Blood Qi works nicely too.
Getting up ignoring the fact that she was actually staring at me the whole night it’s time to for the harvesting….
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Author’s Note: Point of this chapter was as set up for the future arc, so it wasn’t as blue screeny or eventful as most.