Thank you for writing the reviews Maran, Asceal and Blackghosts it also gives me some ideas for my writing.
I had to make some changes to a chapter to make the story a bit more logical I also added some information about the story to the chapter to make the situation about the world a bit more understandable please tell me if you like it and if you a lot of you do I will probably add some more lore when needed.
I changed the wall description from chapter 2 form 25 meters wide and 5 meter wide to 50 meters high and 15 wide at the top and 20 at the bottom. The reason being that I wanted to make the monsters in the outer world stronger and I needed a reason that the country was still existing and not destroyed by the monsters long ago.
I also changed the fiction to mature because there will be some gruesome things in the fiction like fights killing of bandits/slavers/rapists/monsters and it can get a bit gruesome.
Chapter 0 to 5 are uploaded
Chapter 6 is being written
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Lore About Magic
All magic uses mana, and mana is stored in your soul space and your soul generates it. All use of magic bring a burden and most mages use incantation to ask a god to carry that burden for them. If the god likes you enough and the request is sensible. Some warrior and most wizard can also use instant/chant less casting but they only use it for simple spells like using fighting spirit or lighting the stove this method is almost instant but you still need time for the spell to form. But the drawback is that it that you have to carry the burden yourself.
Kyna’s situation: Kyna can cast instant magic at a small or beginner to advanced level magic without and carry the burden herself. Any higher level magic than that would mean that she would damage her body and if she decides to use god level magic without having a god carry most of the burden for her she will more or less self-destruct but the magic will probably be something like a moon having a moon crash on the planet. But because she is of the dragon race she can upgrade her level with special objects/items and that would increase the amount of burden she can bear.
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Chapter 5: Training and first monster
Part 1
Kenshin is comes running towards me while laughing his lungs out
Kyna: “what the hell happened!”
Kenshin: “HAHAhaha wait a second let me catch my breath(few seconds later) ha okay I will tell you what happened you know that your training suit increased your gravity and inhibited your movement right?”
I nodded
Kenshin: “well you are now in the same state as I where in when my master finally let me take off my training suit, you are using way to much power to move if you now want to jump one meter you will probably jump about 10 well that is if your suit was putting you under 10 times normal gravity but yours was probably about that level. And now the next training is to get your strength under control if you don’t and try to shake someone hand you would probably crush it, o yea one tip be careful about running my face still hurts when I think about when I did that. Well that is more or less it I will be staying in the village and you will have to stay here until you finish your training I will stay in the village in case the monsters attack. I can’t help you with your training so I will go now bye”
Kyna: “Wait what?!”
I try to run after him to ask more question but I run way to fast and in about a second there is a tree in my way and I can’t dodge, let alone stop in time and I crash face first into the tree.
Kyna: “Ouch!”
After that I calm down and think about what Kenshin said. Most of it I predicted and or anticipated but not to this degree. I any case, right now I have to think about how I am going to get my power under control. Of course I can easily use my magic to restrain myself but that would also mean that I can’t use my power when I need it in a fight. Well for now I need to get my running under control because If I can’t run without being able to stop/dodge I can forget about hunting and that would mean that I would lose a big source of food. I still have food stored in my soul space but only enough for two weeks maximum, plus I can go without food for a long time but I would still feel like starving and that is not pleasant. well I will start with walking.
I crawled to the open area and stand up and try to walk. After the first few attempts end with me crashing into a tree or something else, I re learn how to walk again and after about an hour or two I am finally able to walk without suddenly accelerating or leaving holes in the ground. Then I set of a slow moving training course with my magic and I try to walk through it while trying to dodge very slowly at the same time dodging at the same time, and after a day I finally was able to dodge at a very slow speed. (RWS: why slow speed? because you have more control at slower speeds) Then the real training starts I use my magic to mage the clearing in a makeshift arena with a barrier at the edges and all kinds of moving contraptions in it, and then I start to dodge and move over the clearing, slowly increasing my speed over time and doing the same with the contraptions. And that is how I continued my training.
Part 2
three weeks later
I have been training in my arena and I am now able to go about 4-5 times my top speed I could with the training suit on without crashing into a tree or jumping way to high. Any higher speed than that is still very hard to control. I tested my total increase In strength by jumping I can jump about 30 to 35 meters high and with the training suit it was about 3 to 4 meters so I have about a 10 times increase in strength. Kenshin also came by and told me how the village was doing there had been no monster attacks with probably means that the monster had lost its pack to the border guards or some other kind of monster. He is also training the village guards swordsmanship’s so that they have something to fall back on in case of arrows being ineffective or in case of close quarters combat and. I hope that when I come back that I do not see all the village guards laying broken after Kenshin’s training. he also gave me some good food that Maya had made for me and I love that because she is a really good cook and I let Kenshin convey my thanks to her.
(back to now)
It is in the middle of the night and I wake up because I feel a very strong presents and hear and I look in the direction of it and I see a giant of about eight to ten meters in high black bear of about eight to ten meters in height with red lines over his body in a pattern and I go over the list of monsters I know and I remember that it is a higher class border/level 1 monster (border monster = close to the edge of the outer/inner world). When it sees me it makes an ear-splitting roar (or growl) and I ready my weapons.
The bear comes at me at a frightening speed and I try to dodge a meter to the side but instead I use to much force and stop about stop about 15 meters from where I wanted to stop. I need to calm down this is my first fight with an outer world monster so I need to stay calm and focus. I activate my fighting spirit and coat my sword in magic and I lunge at the bear and use my new strength to try to cut through hide of his arm he growls at me and he comes at me again and this time faster than before and he slams his claws agent my breastplate and I fly backwards toward a tree. I spit u some blood and look up at the bear and see that he is charging at me again and I use a grabbing technique and throw him into the tree I just stood up from. I slash him in his back with my sword and jump back before he can grab me. He stand up and starts to charge at me again, I use my magic to make a quagmire of the ground and he gets stuck and I give sigh of relief.
But I let my guard down too soon and suddenly the lines and eyes of the bear begin to glow red and he braes free form my trap and he charged at me again but father than before and I could not react quick enough and he stabbed his claws under my breastplate into my intestine. I jump back and I am losing a lot of blood and my vision begins to turn red and I charge at him with even more strength then before, he tries to slash me with his claw but I dodge and cut his left arm of. He gives an ear-splitting roar and comes at me and he tries to hit my head and I move to the right and he missed slightly and I stab him in his stomach and then he kick my leg and I hear a lows snap and I scream. I jump backwards and see that the bone of my lower legged is sticking out of my skin use my magic to make a make shift splint for my leg and start firing fireballs and earth bullets at him while keeping my distance and I strike of pieces of his flesh but nothing seems to affect him anymore. He charges at me again even faster than before I blow of his leg to stop him but he uses his last leg to jump at me and he points his claw forward I dodge by a hairs with and before he can bite me I stab my sword in his head and he land on top of me, dead. With great difficulty I throw of his body from me and I stand up and look at the bear, he looks dead but to be sure I take my sword out of his heard and stab him again for good measure.
I walk back a few meters and I look at my body there is a big hole in my stomach and the bone of my lower left leg sticking out of the skin and I swear to never let my guard down again in a fight as long as my enemy lives. And with that thought I fall down on my back and the last thing I see blue crystal encasing me
Part 3
When I start to wake up it is in the evening and I don’t know what day it is. And through the crystal I see Ken shin siting nearby poking a fire with a stick. I use my magic to scan the state of my body and I find that my big wounds have almost entirely healed. I dispel my crystal and call out to Kenshin.
Kyna: “Hey Kenshin how are you doing”
Kenshin turns around and smiles at me and he comes walking toward me
Kenshin: “oh Kyna you are awake. I came here a day ago and when I saw you I saw you in your crystal there was with a giant hole in your belly I was worried and surprised. But when I saw the bear I was even more surprised. You did a good job killing that bear, it broke through the border about two months ago and the guards tried to stop it but it killed a squad of soldiers and ran to the forest”
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Kyna: “what If you knew that you could have told me at least, I almost died you know!”
Kenshin: “sorry princess, but how did your first real monster fight go?”
I sigh and tell him the how my fight was, about the trap, about that it started glowing red, about how injuries and lastly about how I killed it. He smacked my head with his hand when I told him that I let my guard down in the middle of the fight, and he was very surprised when I told him about that the bear started to glow red.
Kenshin: “I fought a monster like that once it was a special berserker variant of the species. That is probably why he was able to beat the border guards. O yea I also heard that the army put a bounty on the head of this monster if we take some proof of the kill we can probably get some money at the adventures guild”
Kyna: “well at least something good came out of it. So what now, do I continue my training now or do we go on to the next stage?”
Kenshin: “well seeing that you beat a higher level 1 monster you are ready for the next stage for that we will have to travel. But first lets go back to the village I see that you are mostly healed but some rest will do you well”
Kyna: “alright lets go after I dismantle the bear and take any useful parts”
After I dismantle the bear we head to the village. When we arrive almost everyone is sleeping already and I am just grated by Alan before I use my magic to shower and then I head to bed.
(the next morning)
???: “Kyna wake up Kyna”
Kyna: “huh? who is it… oh it is you, Maya why did you wake me up so early?”
Maya: “early it is the middle of the day”
I get out of bed and change in my day clothes and I walk to the table and make some lunch for myself. Maya has followed me and we start to chat a bit about some more or less unimportant things until Kenshin walks in I tell Maya that we will talk later and she leaves with a smile.
Kenshin: “ah your up that’s good I wanted to talk about some things related to the next stage of your training because you will have to make some preparations. The next stage of your training will take please in the dragon fortress mountain range (the place where the old fortress was that was destroyed by the wyverns) it is a very dangers place. There are two reasons why the next stage of trading, one is that while being strong is good you need to be able to survive as well and the second reason is that once every year the border guards send out skilled rangers to survey the mountain range and report information about the monster population and above all the wyverns. I know that your level of stealth is very good otherwise I would not send you there, and I am also greasing that you have some other skills you have not told me about and I am positive you be able to survive there. Lastly I have only two tips for you one do not attack wyverns unless you have no choice. Second even if you fight a wyvern do not fight more that two at the time the level of wyverns is middle level 2 the main reason for that is that in the case of a fight they help each other fight of strong enemy’s. and lastly make sure you have your stealth gear in good condition and be able to kill quietly”
I think a bit about what he told me and the information I know about the wyverns myself. They are quite ruthless creatures and mostly fight in groups of two or three and when the fighting gets to hot they try to flee and seek help of other wyverns. They are not truly stupid but smart wyverns are about one in a thousand. And almost all of them are extremely hostile to humanoid races and lastly that they like gold and beautiful jewels and other shiny things.
Kyna: “Kenshin can you give me a week to prepare some things for the training? it would help a lot”
Kenshin: “of course that’s why I am telling you now. So we will go in a week is do you thing that you will be ready by then?”
Kyna: “yes that is good, I have to go prepare now Kenshin see you later”
After that I walk out to find Maya.
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Character list
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Kyna Pendragon: MC
Acholate: Mother
Wilhelm: Father
Helenia: Grandma
Abarden: Uncle
Melisande: Aunt
Kenshin: Friend/general of father
Alaneo: Chief of Yalian Elf
Maya: Daughter of the chief of Yalian Elf
Alan: Guard of the village of Yalian Elf
Elaina: Leader of the fairy’s in Yalian Fairy
Fyra: personal Guard of Elaina Fairy
Kyna status plate
Spoiler :
Name: Kyna Pendragon
Gender: Female
Age: 6 Years old
Race: Dragon
Status: First princes of the kingdom of Edrana
Gifts:
Berserk
Wiseman
Limit Break
Dragon form (Level 1)
Natural Beauty
Blessing of Nature
Blessing of Shadow
Blessing of Ancients (Hidden)
Black Dragon Flame
White Dragon Flame
Language comprehension
Martial Arts:
Cosmos Sword Saint (Saint rank)
Magic Arts:
Origin Magic System (God Rank) (Hidden)
Skills:
Flute
Math
Stealth
Singing
Dancing
Running
Alchemy
Presence
Designing
Bookworm
Perception
Developing
Killing Intent
Fighting Spirit
Blacksmithing
Instant Casting (Hidden)
Survival Instinct
Mental Mapping
Magic Perception
Perfect Memories
how Kyna looks right now
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she has blue eyes, white hair that reaches the middle of her back she has lean build with strong mussels but they are not bulking outward. And she has this reptile like tail with white scales and she is starting to develop hors but at this moment there are still very tiny and growing slowly from sides of her head
Dragon Forms (Known so far)
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Level 1 - Be born:
• Half Dragon = Horns and Tail
Level 2 - Moonstone: (rarity B)
• Humanoid form = Any Humanoid beings (no monster)
• Half Dragon = Horns, Tail and Wings
Map + current location
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Map info/Nobel houses
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Nobel house
Arndwell Control the South east human nobles
• Daermod 1st Son of current head of the Arndwell family (human)
Davenlow Control the north east beastmen nobles
• Acele 1st Daughter of current head of the Davenlow family (beastmen)
• Ikini 2nd Daughter of current head of the Davenlow family (beastmen)
Cunningsmith Control the North West dwarven nobles
• Endor 1st Son of current head of the Cunningsmith family (dwarven)
Nightfall special tasks for royal family vampire nobles
• Fydar 1st Son of current head of the Nightfall family (vampire)
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Neighbour country
Edrana our country
Yuyasil ruled by elves
southern half of western border good relationship multi species
• Efari 1st Princess of Yuyasil 2nd in line for the throne (elf)
Oneutharia ruled by beastmen
eastern half southern border neutral+ relationship Beastmen
Ufsemus ruled by Humans
western half southern border neutral- relationship human