English is my second language any criticism is welcome.
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Chapter 1 version 2:
DO YOU WANT TO CONNECT TO ROYAL ROAD?
YES/NO
Kaiser moaned. What a idiotic question, are they idiots why else would he be in the game capsule if he didn't want to connect to the royal road.
“Yes”
A mechanical voice then said:
“The scan on your iris determined that you don't have an account. Do you wish to create an account?”
“Yes again”
“Welcome to Royal Road. Please name your Avatar”
“Nyarlathotep”Kaiser replied choosing the name of his favourite character in the H.P. Lovecraft books.
“Sex?”
“Male”
Kaiser didn't want to change his sex. He was a proud men.
“Appearance?”The computer asked mechanically.
“Mine”Kaiser replied in haste.
“Race?”
“Demon”
“I am sorry the Demon race has still not been unlocked please choose another race.”
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Kaiser opened his mouth to reply to the question when the mechanical voice continued.
“but as the millionth player to create a character you can ignore one rule of character generation do you want to use that as to start your character as a demon?”
“Yes”
“The only city available for a Demon are the Capital of Hell Pandaemonium, which means paradise lost as the sinners of hell would never be able to enter the paradise that is Heaven.
In burst of light Kaiser disappeared from the creation room and when he opened his eyes. He was in the middle of street and smelt the smell of burning flesh, as he looked around he saw many criminals being punished for their crimes on Earth or foolish Humans that made caontract with demons and were dragged down to hell and were being punished for the entertainment of Demons.
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By Elmort
I need help on deciding the class, any help is welcome.