STOP TRYING TO LOOK INTELLIGENT
REVIEWED AT: EPISODE 34-SALES DIVISION
BY CAZZTETE29/09/2020, 16:24:10
This story try way too much to look intelligent with its plot.
The people at the top (so the most cunning and intelligent) all jump to conclusion without any evidences.
The MC take himself for a master pupetter when the only things he do is repeating what the other character understood without any evidence. And he knows exactly what his enemies moves are when they fucking make decision over absolutely 0 evidences.
Seriously this is dumb, farting higher than its own head.
Grammar is OK, style is bland, character bland too.
Don't recommend.
First of all, I want to thank you for this review along with giving me my first review on this site.
I never stated that all the people at the top are absolutely clever and intelligent and therefore perfect. They are mortals and they make mistakes, unlike the MC, who is written as a near-perfect being because of his true identity. This you should have understood from having seen the number of mistakes they have made.
Those people at the top are mortals, who have to make decisions spontaneously without any evidence because sometimes waiting for evidence will be too late for them. Also sometimes they are not able to acquire any evidence because none is left for them. Hence they have to make do with what they have.
Regarding my MC. I have shown many times that he is not a truly intelligent or clever person, but rather he is an experienced, person. I thought I made it clear throughout the novel so many times. In fact, I have also stated this in my MC's glossary in the wiki. Compared to other souls, angels and even God shown in the first few chapters he is barely considered average. It's just that unlike them he had to desperately use his head (which not many of the people in heaven uses because they don't really have to) because of his deal with God.
He is so used to dealing with this sort of situation that he instinctively knows the best route to take for certain situations. Remember he is not smart or clever but rather just knows the best route to take, that it seems like the best move for others. (It's a bit like a chess champion playing against a complete newbie in chess. The champion can just instinctively see the best moves to take without breaking a sweat in few seconds, while the newbie is actively trying to plan out his moves by working his brain to the limit for hours.)
He can predict what others can do to a lot of degrees because he was an omniscient being before arriving in that world. He knows and understands their nature as humans and mortals, and their ability to make mistakes and therefore is able to make a perfect plan to what they might be thinking. In fact, he can predict it to the near absolute perfect degree.
I have made it clear on my synopsis that 'This novel is aimed at a certain target audience.'. I guess you are not amongst that targeted audience so farewell. Thanks for reading up to chapter 34.
Once again thank you for your review.
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THE SNARK IS REAL
REVIEWED AT: EPISODE 29-SHINE BRIGHT LIKE A DIAMOND
BY STORYHUNTER04/10/2020, 02:36:25
alright
did not get though everything in the story but got a good gist of what this author is going for
the snark.
If your looking for a well developed plot. exstensive and serious characterizations there here two but this story is all about being the ultimate snark.
pop a real wise crack even with out saying it. Playing a prank by having your enemies play the prank for you on each other all while keeping them confused.
The style needs a bit of work because while snark can work as a central pillar the main character is not really the best situated to use it. The author walked his character into a situation where it could not be lazy. This resulted in a situation where its power and influence was limmited and its "dead lines" extreamly hard coded. This reduces the freedom of the snarky protagonist.
Story issues that I see. While the story is good and well thought out it pulls from really tierd story ideas without adding anything to them. ( that is the problem with the intro) After the intro the story becomes more interesting deeper and well developed but because the main characters limmited in his ability to freely act it drops the overall bit. Though I would say that overall good read esp if you enjoy snark
The genuine version of this novel can be found on another site. Support the author by reading it there.
characters is where the story shines through the most. Our main is a smart ass snarky character that tries to get one over on God. In the first couple chapers of the book and nearly has success. Think of the poor mortals who have to live with him after.
anyway good story if you like a smart ass, slow build, snarky character.
First of all, I thank you for your review.
I want to start off with your feedback on my prologue. As I said before this is my first story, and I was trying to experiment with the prologue. I had no other ideas at that time in how to start it as I was a complete noob at it(still am), and was trying to make a joke about cliche scenes(but failed).
I hope I made it clear why the prologue was a bit of a failure. FYI- the prologue, later on, becomes relevant in volume 3. Also, I think I improved my ability to mock a cliche situation somewhere near the end of volume 2. If I haven't please do tell me.
Now moving onto my lazy ass MC.
I intended to create a lazy character from the very start, otherwise, this would have seemed more like a wish-fulfilment story, not a survival one with Ez's knowledge and capabilities(you will understand his true capabilities in volume 3).
Besides I wanted to show that being omniscient, omnipotent and omnipresent can make any being lazy like Ez. To people like them working is considered a sacrilege. Imagine how difficult it must be for a billionaire to suddenly lose all his wealth and power, and had to end up working as a construction site worker. They won't be suited to it, and will not find it enjoyable. It is a similar situation but much worse times by a trillion(there is literally no words or number to describe Ez's pathetic situation).
He has lived for more than thousands of years in luxury and power that even the top billionaires of the world can't imagine. The very power to create and destroy universes if he as much as desired. He is obviously going to be lazy with all that luxury and power.
I always thought my characters is the one that needed the most work(I am very bad at feeling emotions and guessing emotions and social cues, so it is hard for me to create and develop characters), but thank you for letting me know that I am doing well in that department.
I will try and improve on any areas if you can give me further feedbacks on chapters you find that needs the improvement.
Once again thank you for your feedback. I appreciate you, taking your time to help me improve my story.
Also, can someone clarify to me whether snark means clever?
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OH HEY, YOU HERE TOO
REVIEWED AT: REPLY TO REVIEWS
BY GEORPPY15/11/2020, 23:01:23
I've been reading this since webnovel and I've gotta say it's my favorite yet. Though its not perfect I like how you can immerse in it and see where the MC is coming from. This takes 'lazy people find a way around' to its limits.
Though I do have a problem with the system and the strange dimension as I do not know it contributes to the story as a whole.
Try it. I'll assure you that you'll laugh your heart out.
First of all, I thank you for your review.
I appreciate you taking your time to review my novel. Also could explain which part of the system and dimension you are having a problem and I will try to answer it without spoiling the story for you
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I LIKED IT
REVIEWED AT: EPISODE 150- KICKING OUT!
BY Danyel N14/12/2020, 18:54:10
Well for now i find it intresting this novel .bit usually these kind of novels after 100 or 200 chapters they become just boring like everything repeating itself over and over so i hope you the author wont end this great story like that.i wish you luck and waitning for new chaptwrs
First of all, thank you for your review.
The reason why I find most novels like these getting repetitive is that the author wants to extend the chapter counts in order to keep the money rolling in from their readers.
As for me, I have got a clear picture of what should and shouldn't happen till the finale. So hopefully I won't keep repeating.
P.S.-If my story does start getting repetitive do inform me.
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One if the best on royal road and webnovel
REVIEWED AT: EPISODE 156- COUNTING DOWN!
BY PureAy25/01/2021, 00:19:33
The story flows so well. You can enver expect whats going to happen next. The mc is written so well you can't predict abything they'll do. The schemes of the mc aren't super aparent like orher storys. Every chapter shows something new. This is one of my favorire storys. The mc actually has intelligence unlike every other story on here were they cant come to baic conclusions.
I know my review is shitty but you MUST read this story. You wont regret it
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Thank you for taking your time for reviewing.