16/03/2017 Edit: Chapter 1.
I cleared a few details, and some minor grammatical blunders. I proofread myself, and type on my phone. As for major edits, I'll recommend you to reread Alice's point of view; I've changed a lot, and you could say that Alice's character was fundamentally altered. I've grantedbher greater plot relevance, and full autonomy and agency. She'll be her own player, and not merely a license of others.
17/03/2017 Edit: Chapter 2
I've added some foreshadowing, cleared up what may be a few plot holes, etc as I continue to develop the story plot. I've stabilised Arthur's character, and I have a more concrete idea where I'll be going with him.
17/03/2017 Announcement
I'm going to be swamped with coursework and exams to mid or late April. My uploading speed will sharply drop. I'll try to update at least once a week, but if I have to take a month or two long hiatus, I hope you will bear with me.
This possible hiatus will be for a lot of things in addition to letting me deal with school work.
1. It will let me plan out this story. For the most part, I've been ad-libbing this story, and do not yet have a definite plot. It's why all the chapters are drafts for now.
2. It will let me do much needed research into psychology, allowing me to depict more realistic characters deliver on the psychology front etc.
3.it will let me do much needed research on emotive writing, show not tell, developing 3-D characters etc. I'll come back a much stronger Author.
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4. It will let me do much needed research on strategy and Modern Warfare; the characters I'm writing have ELO ratings in the 3000s; I want to realistically convey that.
5. It will let me do more research into rationality, and hopefully let me finish up "Rationality: From AI to Zombies". Part of the reason of writing this story, is to introduce the art of rationality. A lot of the characters depicted in are rationalists.
6. It will let finalise the World Building, Politics, characters, relationships, etc. I'll be able to have a fully developed world.
When I resume from my (possible) Hiatus, I'll be delivering at a steady rate of at least one regular chapter a week. My regular chapters would be between 5000 - 20000 words.
My current rate is unmantainable, and I want to focus on quality over quantity.
I'll do my best to deliver an epic fusion of Sci-fi and fantasy.
18/03/2017 Edit: Chapter 2
I changed the wording and formatting. Only a few minor details were changed, but the sentences should be more readable, and I was trying to structure Arthur's speech to be consistent.
18/03/2017 Announcement
Prologue and Chapter 1 will be rewritten, they may be scrapped entirely rehauled, but it will be very different. Chapter 2 and 3, will be largely unaffected. Only some minor alterations here and there, but a lot will change for the MC's chapters. I'm planning those two chapters, and when I've rewritten them, they may no longer even be two.
I received a wonderful critique on Reddit pointing out the problems in my story, and I will work to remedy them, as best as I can. The infodumps and some back story will be cut out at the very least.
20/03/2017 Rewrite: Prologue
The prologue has been completely rewritten from scratch. You'll need to reread everything again. As a side note, Chapter 1 won't get written as I'll be busy with school till May.
23/03/2017 Edit: Prologue
I have edited the prologue, and done my best to increase the emotional impact as much as I can. Please take a look, and tell me what you think.
23/03/2017 Announcement
I would not be doing any writing till May. I am positiively overwhelmed with schoolwork, and struugling to salvage my semester. When May comes, at latest Mid-may, I'll start writing again, and guarantee a steady release; either once a week, or twice a week. I'll try to compensate the reduced quantity with quality, and have accumulated a backdrop of tens(may soon cross hundred) of books I will read in the course of writing this story to convey the best experience I can.