Thanks for the comments they really helped so here is the revised
Prologue
John stared out from the prow of the boat and gazed upon the majestic shoreline. Fir oak and rowan wood he could make out from the edges of the forest that sat next to the beach they would land upon. John started laughing; he recognized this place he had explored it during his beta testing of the game. When he read that he would be starting on the opposite side of the continent he had hoped that they would land here. The strongest monster here was a couple level 20 bears. But if you went 10 miles further north or south you would hit planes with monster that ranged from level 90-110 and the further inland you went the higher the levels got. (No wonder only four others decided to take up this challenge) he thought. “This is going be fun.” John said then smiled evilly. He hadn’t had any real fun in eight years since his parent’s death. He still had nightmares of that day the terror and anger of losing his parents still haunted him. For the first two years he sought out fights to take out his anger on someone to blame someone. Then, he started playing MMORPG’s and found some solace in them but none of them were like Pioneers of the Lost. Pioneers of the Lost was the first VRMMORPG to ever come out developed by an unknown company with what they called a Full Immersion Pod or FIP for short. The realism made you think you had really gone to a different world. John was 23 when the beta test was announced he applied for it immediately and was approved. On the first day of the beta they had been told that the first five to explore the whole of the continent of Delgaria would get a special option when the game released. John had an edge over everyone else he didn't need to do anything but play the game. The money he got from the insurance and what he had inherited was enough to live comfortably for the rest of his life.
He didn’t like to use that money but for a chance to escape to be someone else was worth it. Through the next 2 months he worked to earn one of the five spots for the special awards. At the end of the beta he got it then waited 4 months for the game to be released. During that time John decided to work out again and took classes in MMA and Kendo. Then during the day of the release 6 hours before launch he climbed into his bullet shaped pod.
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WELCOME TO VISION CORPS. FULL IMMERSION POD
WOULD YOU LIKE TO LAUNCH PIONEERS OF THE LOST
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“Yes”
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LOADING GAME ….
THERE IS STILL 5 HOURS AND 45 MINUTES TILL RELEASE WOULD YOU LIKE TO GO TO CHARTER CREATION
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“Yes”
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INITIATING CHARACTER CREATION
BETA TESTER DECTED
REROUTING TO SPECIAL SPACE
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A bright light envelopes John and when it dissipates he finds himself in a white room standing in front of a man in a tuxedo. “Isn’t there usually supposed to be a gorgeous woman here” He says sarcastically. The man of average height and looks at John then replies with a smile “If we did that the sexual harassment file would increase so males get males and females get females” John also crack a smile at this because this is a 18+ game it makes since. “Let me pull up your information now. Aw Mr. Yoder correct?” the man says “Yes that’s me.” (Not that anyone else can use my FIB they are programmed to your brain waves) John replies dryly “You shall get a choice that regular players don’t get. As you know the populated kingdoms only reside on one side of the coast on the continent of Degria and the biggest only has population of a couple hundred thousand.” The man states “Yes because the back story is that all the kingdoms were once refugees who came from over the sea some 500 years ago.”John replied (and they only managed to claim one fourth of the continent which means lots of opportunities for me) He thought and let slip out a sinister smile “Y-yes “ stuttered them man slight worry showing across his face “For your reward you can either get the standard beta tester reward or there is the extreme setting option you can choose with its own unique variant race of human” his words hit me like a cannonball a variant race could mean unlimited opportunities or extreme failure. “ Has any of the others taken this option?” John asked “Yes but the other four got different races then the one being offered to you we tried to match the races to how you played in the game” the man replied.
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PLAY AS THE SHIRITIAN LEADER
500 Years ago the 6 kingdoms took to the seas to escape the Fallen one who appeared in the middle of the old continent of Segrea. But 1 Empire stayed to fight him. The Shiritian were a proud warrior people who refused to run they live on the opposite side of the continent then the 6 kingdoms so they were where long thought over run long ago. But in truth they fought the Fallen one till the very present. After a long string of defeats they finally sealed the Fallen one but not before he put a curse on the land itself. After years of starvation the Shiritian Empire was left barely even a fraction of its former glory. With a population of fewer than 20,000 the current Emperor has decided to seek out new land. HE Has appointed you leaders of the scouting exhibition you board one of the 5 scout ships and set out while bigger transports are built and waiting for your word to set sail when land is found. After a year of sailing and losing your 4 brother ships to storms and monsters you sight land off the horizon.
CHOOSING THIS OPTIONS UNLOCKS THE FOLLOWING
Shiritian Variant unlocked
100 NPC subjects with 50% Loyalty
Starting point on opposite side of the Continent of Degria
Special Stat Leadership
Special Stat Charisma
Gain 20 extra unassigned stat points
Will not start with starting package
Will be able to summon more people once settlement is started
Difficulty: SSS
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John stood there stunned ( a triple S rated difficulty WHAT THE HELL no wonder noboby else wanted this. They probably thought it was a death trap) he thought. “Can I see the overview of the Shiritian people?” John asked (maybe there’s something there?) He thought “Yes here you go” replied the man.
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Shiritian Race Unlocked!
The Shiritian were known long ago for their love of battle and warfare. Before the fallen ones most wars involved the Shiritian Empire and they loved it. Whether it be infantry or cavalry they out classed every other Sovereignty on the continent. But interestingly they did not believe themselves superior there culture thrived because they would integrate different peoples from different lands into their own. History has never said why and the Empire has forgotten after all this time. Long thought destroyed by the Fallen one the Shiritian have finally left the old continent after much blood shed and loss. They managed to seal the fallen one only 50 years ago but before he was sealed he cast a curse of famine and death upon the land. The slowly dying race looks towards the seas for there salvation.
Shiritian Racial Information
50% Increase in learning speed for combat skills and combat related skills
40% decrease in learning speed for crafting skills and crafting related skills
25% increase to movement speed
Str, Agi and Dex start at 15
Int and Wis start at 8
Can Choose a second starting skill as long as it is a combat skill or combat related
Shiritian Racial Traits
Imdomitial Will trait unlocked
60% Bonus applied when training to regain lost stats due to death penalty
Honor Duel skill unlocked
Raging Warrior trait unlocked
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(..... No wonder it’s a triple S ranked they suck at crafting) John thought but as he starts weighing the pros and cons he realizes something. (This could be fun it’s a hard challenge sure but they didn’t make it impossible). If there was one thing John liked more than anything it was a challenge “So what’s your answer?” Asks the man “Yes”