Hi ho I can't think of anything to continue the story...... So I'm going reader interactive if ya have an idea comment it and let's see where this goes
Authors bunker: heya guys this is my first fiction and i would love anyone who eventually reads this to give some (Constructive) critisisms of my work.
Im fifteen and have school so my uploading schedule will prob be a big mess for a while.
I hate writing with keyboards and im not very adept with them so punctuation will most definitely be appalling until i get used to it.
Anyhoo im taking some inspiration from Warhawx here (All hail Cygnas our one true goddess) so some similarities may be seen
i hope you likey
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Welcome to Inventum online
Login
yes/no
yes
welcome to another world
invent
create
dominate
wowowow getting a bit ahead of myself i see.
hmmmmmm
well lets go back a few hours and see what led up to this point
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"OWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW THE PAIN"
"mr richards are you alright"
"what the fuck do you think"
my nurse, pamela, scowled at me as she opend the door to my somewhat fancy hospital room
"no need to be rude hunter richards"
*sigh*"sorry pam i broke my arm again"
i stared at that stupid laptop that fell off my stand and proceded to break my arm on its journey to the floor. ow how i hate you brittle bone disease, why must you hurt me so
i smiled as i lifted my limp arm in her direction. it didnt hurt anymore only the inital surge of pain actually makes me feel anything, now its just mildly annoying
"come now you must be more careful mr richards"she proceeded to examine my arm before putting it in a cast, just a plastic thing to support my arm. one is kept in my room at all times due to this being a regular occuance.
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"i was coming to get you in any case, the doctor wanted to check on you one last time before you entered suspended animation"ahhhh yes finally my pod for Inventum Online has arrived. unlike anyone else im getting a special suspended animation pod from zion, my fathers company. its mainly so doctors can monitor my health ingame easier. it also comes with a feature that puts me in suspended animation which means i can basically live the game
we arrived at doctor wallaces room where he gave me a checkup that im sure ive had a bazillion times over the last fiew days. i then got wheeled back to my room to wait for the pod to arrive......
i wated and waited...
Gahhhhh this is so boring. for the last hour and a half ive been skimming through the inventum online forums but even 3 hours before the launch nothings been released. my dad, the ceo of zion, wants it to be a surprise for everyone even me
after yet another quater of an hour of waiting, pam wordlesly entered my room and wheeled me out to a stark white room with a tank of blue gel inside and two doctors.
the doctors placed monitoring equipment on me and i was given an oxygen mask
i was then carefully lowered into the weirdly warm gel and told to relax
my world went dark and then an endless landscape appeared before me
a window with initializing 0.01% appeared a second later 0.02% *sigh* this is gonna take a while
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nearly 3 fricking hours later a window appeared saying
Welcome to Inventum online
this faded after a fiew seconds and another zapped into place
Login
yes/no
ummmmmmmmmm "yes"
my world shifted in a spectrum of colours and a man in a dark suit appeared
"Welcome to inventum a world here anything is possible" he said in a surprisingly uppity tone
he looked around 30 years old and had a small goatee and mustache.
"h-hello"damnit i had to stutter didnt i
"who are you?"i inquired in a more dignified voice
he beamed before saying "im glad you asked, my name is innovicus ,in for short, and im the AI in charge of this world"........."think of me as its ruler or god" he added
ok this guys strange but whatever.
"soooooooooooo what happens now"
"now is charactor creation" he said in a jovial tone. he swiped his hand and a line of people and ceatures several hundread metres long appeared
"wow thats a lotta choice" i walked up to the line and peared at the first race a human that looks just like an older version of me..... boring next an elf *sigh*, dwarf,dryad.......
i walked along a fiew more races before asking "hey in is there a golem race"
"yes there is"
he flicked his hand and before me appeared a humanoid golem my height but made of stone.
"hey can i change how it looks"
"of course"
a window appeared before be with several different options
height: 180cm
brawn: 50
waist width
you get the idea
i changed myself to be a three metre tall dark grey stone golem with glowing yellow eyes and runic tatoos across my body, basically like this (http://pathfinder.sendric.com/pathblog/rise-of-the-runelords/sins-of-the-savior/stone-golem/) without the stone mohawk and backspikes
i clicked confirm on the window and my whole world shifted
i felt bigger
"hey up there"shouted in"what do you want your name to be"
the most important part of evvery charactor..............ok i got nothing *sigh* "hunter" wow my voice is deep
"ok now you need to choose if you want to use magic and what type"he then said"you can have two types of magic from this list"
a window once again popped into existence in front of me
fire
water
earth
wind
lightning
ice
light
darkness
"is this all"that lists small okay
"for now yes but later ingame youll get more types that branch off from your original two"
"ummmm ok im gonna go with earth and lightning" i went with earth because im made of stone and lightening cause thor is cool
"right nearly done now just choose your starting weap.."
i nearly squealed"two handed stone maul"......what i wanna smash dem giant spiders
"ok thats everything now are you sure of your choices"
"yes"
"good luck"
"hey wai.."
my world once again flashed
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heya thanks for reading ma first chapter
anyhoo can someone help me i dont know how to make tables without exel