Like in the older version of this story this on will also get the some treatment. The story isn't dead, im taking my time to put more thought into it. I want the important characters (Jack, Kain, Selen, Galderus and Kemok) to have their own personalities. I want to have a clear purpose to the story and plan on what will happen. I had the thought of trying to divide everything into episodes with a main story that they push forwards. For example episode 2 will be mainly about Jack finding himself in this flipped world and slowly coming to accept it as another chance. Itll contain multiple chapters in an episode. Im not experienced in writing but this is a story i really want to make, even if i have to rewrite it 100 time just to get it right.
Ive been taking my time and mulling over ideas and changes to what i have along with stuff i should probably cut out or expand on.
0 - im probably going to cut out the whole hatching problems Jack has that effects his health and have him be fine.
0 - Im not sure if i want Jack to be black from the corruption when he hatches or to have it slowly spread as he grows up.
0 - The idea of being a hatchling is effecting his choices and stuff sounds cool so i might do that.
0 - i wanna expand on the prologue, revamp Jacks men with characters, revamp the massacre, revamp World. The prologue is the longest and im unhappy with everything. I want it to give context to who Jack is and tie it to stuff that can happen later in the story.
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Overall i want to make the story about a man having everything taken from him and having to come to the realization that maybe he could make this life better than the last one now that he no longer has ties holding him back. Going from a hard life to a loving one with whatever struggles it causes from what hes used to. I really want characters to have progression. I feel like Jack and Kain could have a really cool tie to eachother with Jack being realistic and seeing the darker side to everything and Kain being innocent and seeing the brighter side. The two could help eachother change and catch the other in their lowest moments and develope a strong bond.
I want Selen, Galderus and Kemok to all have a similar problem of not doing what they wish they could do but dealing with what they have. Selen wishes to continue fighting but her injury took that from her. Galderus wanted to work with his family on the farm but had to be a lawyer to support them to keep the farm theirs or something. Kemok is the same and became a doctor.
I would love to have this story span over several books. Book 1 could be about his life as a hatchling, book 2 is about his teen life, book 3 adult. Across those books could be a main story revolving around the corruption World cursed him with. Every time Jack dies it corrupts him more, leading to crazy cool horror stuff later and how It effects his life.
I wanna do a lot with this story. Its probably too big of a dream but i really want to try to make it happen.
As i go ill probably do as i am with making different versions of the story. Might be cool to look back at the previous versions. Im open to talk if you have any questions or tips or thoughts or anything.