+Verity

+Summary suggestions

+Cover Thoughts

+Use your vote elsewhere

+Thoughts and Input

+Health and Circumstances

+Random Thoughts

Point One: Recently, I've been hit with several complaints from people about being mislead...well, not really that recently. It's been happening since about Chapter...16? I belive it was, and I feel I need to address it. The complaint is in regards to Verity. Some people don't like her and only care about Crimson, that is perfectly fine, that's your opinion and I can respect that, but the complaint I'm getting is that she's 'suddenly' being pushed into the limelight, that she's 'suddenly' taking a larger role. I actually tried to bring her in slowly, she's been around since the early chapters, but I've slowly been growing her role since then.

The issue though, is that some (only a few) have expressed that they would prefer if she didn't have such a strong role, and feel betrayed that I've given her such prominence. I've thought about it a long time, and decided to bring it to the people despite the problems it may cause. If those problems spiral enough I'll probably just delete this, but I hope it doesn't reach that point. My question is this: what changes can I make that make it more apparent that we will have multiple perspectives? I've included the tag, but should I include some kind of warning? That feels stupid, but may be necessary. This is also asking about feedback for the eventual 4th Draft (no I'm not leaving this one, I'm just making notes for future reference) so even if I don't make any immediate changes I hope that it'll help in the future.

I can't get rid of Verity, she's a prominent character and this has been planned from the beginning - from the first draft! And not only that, I plan on adding more! We're quite close to meeting several of them for the first time, so I'm also using this feed back to try and improve their introduction.

Point Two: I want to change the summary. I recently rewrote it, but I'm not sure I like it and I'm not sure it represents the story enough. Please give me feedback and if you want to try your hand at writing it yourself, then please PM me what you write, I'll credit you if I decide to use it, and everyone who submits will receive a thanks in the next chapter. For anyone and everyone who decides to help me out with this: THANK YOU!!!

Point Three: What are your thoughts on the current cover? I still quite like it, I feel Gimble did a good job, but I'm in reevaluation mode, and I'm putting everything under the microscope. (It's also super eye-catching which is something else I love about it)

Point Four: Royal Road recently implemented a voting system. I'm not sure I like it, I'm not sure what I think about it. Please use your vote elsewhere. Maybe in the future you'll see me begging for votes, but for the moment, please use yours elsewhere - preferably for a smaller fiction that needs an audience, I've already got plenty of followers (thanks so much for following!) and don't need it as much as other people might.

Unauthorized use: this story is on Amazon without permission from the author. Report any sightings.

Point Five: Please submit any feedback you have, I'd prefer to receive it as a PM, but the comments also work. I understand the PM system is quite a pain. (Feedback would be: thoughts, likes, dislikes, [Skill], [Class], [Title] suggestions etc.)

Point Six: I will continue trying to work at the pace I have been, but I want to make it clear about my health circumstances. I may potentially have either Thyroid issues or early onset Arthritis...and it's almost definitely the first of those two issues. Unfortunatly, this manifests as join pain in my fingers that makes it hard to write. Because of my current circumstances I won't be able to see a Doc about it until around mid-late July, and I'll spend the mean time trying not to become an ibuprofen addict. No need for worries or concerns, I just wanted to share. Aside from that, I'm back in college, and I recently had my mid-terms, so the next chapter will be delayed. I'm sorry for the delay, but at the same time not sorry, that extra time gave me a brilliant idea for how to line things up so I can get a strike with the next few plot points.

Point Seven: I really like it when you guys comment. It's the only way I can engage with you and I just love reading your theories and ideas, it makes me so excited and happy whenever I get an alert about someone commenting. Do you like it when I comment back? Are you fine if I clarify or answer questions? Would you rather be left to your theories? I keep asking you all to engage, but what kind of engagement would you like to see from me?

Would you like to start seeing more lore chapters? I do have a side story planned, but that won't be coming up for a little bit, Crimson needs to be a lot stronger and he needs to have gathered his party.

Are there any more details about Crimson's magic or abilities that you want to know more about, or that you feel needs clarification? What about Verity or the [Blessing]? (Certainly there's a lot you still don't know about the [Blessing], I'm asking specifically from what's already been said). Are there any stories or characters you want more time devoted to?

How have I been doing with 'show, don't tell' these past 7 or so chapters? It's something that's important to me, and I worry that I've been telling too much.

Here's just a bit of a ramble to end things off. I've cultivated a writing style with a lot of set up and build up, but the payoff is a long time coming. I try to include a lot of plausibility in my writing like, "Oh, I could see that happening, it's not just because the protag is protagging." Because of that I'm fine if Crimson occasionally loses, I literally have future losses, pain, frustration, and setbacks planned. Those things are all plausible to me, so I like using them, not only that, it makes him more human and things are more intersting. It's natural conflict. The issue that comes with this, is that I write from Crimson's perspective in the third person. You only know what he knows, so things aren't always as they seem. He's been lied to several times, misled, his opinon has influenced your understanding. How is that an issue, that seems normal? It's an issue because there are times when someone lies to him, clearly lies, but no one takes a second to thing about it deeper, or you lack enough information to see what's going on which necessitates a re-read. This is honestly why I like theories, it encourages you to think more deeply about what's going on and points out potential flaws in my logic (I've certainly not been perfect). This is literally just a ramble, I don't know how I would go about changing anything...literally as I wrote that an idea came to mind to help out a little. Unfortunately, I won't be able to make use of it for a while, it requires a certain member of Crimson's party...but it's a good idea.

Should I get an editor?