I will be uploading minimum 1 chapter every Thursday.
There's a chance that I'll upload a few extra during the week if I get bored waiting until Thursday 😭
This chapter is just to ask for possible improvements. I would appreciate it if anyone has anything they'd like me to improve/change.
Is Sebastian okay as a character? I feel like he doesn't show too much emotion so I'm thinking of forcing him to communicate more in the upcoming chapters. 😭😭 But I'm not sure if I should, or just keep him like this.
It's my first time writing a novel so I'm still learning to write emotive characters 3.
Is there anything that you guys would like me to add? Classes? System changes? System shop? Inventory? Etc.
I'm thinking of updating the system for the awakened soon, so I've been thinking about what new features to add.
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Should I give him more friends? They probably won't last long anyway 😭
One thing I've been considering is adding more depth to the world-building. For example, would you like to see more detailed descriptions of the Tower's environment, or perhaps more background on the Awakened Alliance and the academy?
I've also been thinking about how to develop the supporting characters. Should I give Marissa and "others" more backstory? Would you like to see more interactions that highlight their personalities and motivations? Or maybe descriptions of their looks? I want to make sure they feel as real and compelling as possible, even if their time in the story might be limited.
Additionally, I'm curious about your thoughts on the pacing. Do you feel like the story is moving too fast, too slow, or just right?
For me, I feel like it's going too slow and he should just spend all his time in the tower so I can see him devour everything, that's just me though.
Balancing action, character development, and world-building feels a bit difficult tbh, and I'd love to hear your feedback on how to improve.
Would you like to see more detailed fight scenes or more strategic elements? Also, how do you feel about the current balance between action and dialogue? Should I introduce more subplots or focus on the main storyline?
Thank you for reading so far, I appreciate it < 3