Please use constructive criticism as that is the only thing I'm here for. Don't say "It's shit." and then move on. Well, you can but if you would tell me why it's shit then I would be thankful..... even if I don't reply   P.S: It's less than a thousand words so it will only take like a minute of your time. Also, for anyone complaining about plot, shut it, I literally found a pic and improvised a short story in less than an hour. I'm sure a good plot could be made like that but if I wanted a good plot, I would've planned it out first.